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Solitary Poet Captain
Joined: 08 Aug 2004 Posts: 805 Location: Lancaster (Dallas), Texas
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Mon Oct 25, 2004 1:39 pm {THE QUEEN} a poem |
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I haven�t written a poem since I was a teenager so don�t laugh just tell me what you think.
THE QUEEN
Mourning in the morning
Claws dig into your face
That pain in your chest
It�s not just a jest
It�s the end of the human race
Your death rattle
Her majesty�s battle
Screams of rage-for air
She lives for pain
Your children she�s slain
Even her life�s blood burns
Her love is fear
Whispered in your ear
She has taken your turns
Your anguish she learns
Is life for her kind
She draws you
Wants you needs you
Your dreams she haunts
Your blood she flaunts
Mourning in the morning
Claws dig into your face
That pain in your chest
It�s not just a jest
Her majesty�s fallen from grace
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�STARGATE: Highlander�, Is Methos an Egyptian god?
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Starbuck faster...
Joined: 19 Feb 2003 Posts: 8715 Location: between chaos and melody
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Tue Oct 26, 2004 8:45 am |
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Thats really good. I'm printing it and putting it in my locker.
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Solitary Poet Captain
Joined: 08 Aug 2004 Posts: 805 Location: Lancaster (Dallas), Texas
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Tue Oct 26, 2004 1:38 pm |
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I hope you enjoy it. Some people at the Helix BBS forum asked if they could set it to music.
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lionhead Rear Admiral
Joined: 26 May 2004 Posts: 4020 Location: The Delta Quadrant (or not...)
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Wed Oct 27, 2004 8:43 am |
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I don't understand Poetry. when it rhymes good i enjoy reading it, but i never seem too find the message or morales.
I don't find this one rhyme well enough. is it: 1221?
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Never explain comedy or satire or the ironic comment. Those who get it, get it. Those who don't, never will. -Michael Moore
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Wed Oct 27, 2004 2:10 pm |
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Great poem!
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Solitary Poet Captain
Joined: 08 Aug 2004 Posts: 805 Location: Lancaster (Dallas), Texas
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Wed Oct 27, 2004 2:42 pm |
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Not all poems are supposed to rhyme. Poe only rhymed half of the time.
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