"Set Like The Sun." A short poem.

[Captian_Janeway]

"I regret to inform you..." the doctor said.
As he glanced at the people around my bed.
"...she died during childbirth, but the babe still lives."
She'll never know of the love a mother gives.
I was overcome with madness,
I made a promise for my girl out of sadness.
My daughter would find joy gracefully as a dove.
the three great joys; marriage, childbirth, and her one true love.
From a star in the vast sky,
I watched her as the years went by.
Through the many obstacles in her life,
she never let them cut her like a knife.
From my star I watched her find her one true love,
all she needed from me was one gentle shove.
The two of them married and lived happily ever after,
but they waited for the air to fill with a baby's laughter.
One year went by then another, and many years more,
and finally came the day when a baby she bore.
My purpose was filled and the job was done,
I was ready and I set like the sun.

What do you think of my poem??

[janewaykat]

that's very good.

[1/1]

Thats so sad! At least it had a happy ending or did he kill himself when the sunset?

[Divinity]

i really like that! you should write more

[Voy_Girl]

That was a really good poem!

[Josi Rockholt]

It was very good.