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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
Joined: 04 Feb 2003 Posts: 4577
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Mon Jul 21, 2003 5:47 pm Star Trek Voyager: In Elementary School Grade 8 |
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ussshorty, has inspired me to write and post the following.
I put a story similar to tng in high school. But its alittle bit funnier that hers.
Read it and tell me what ya think?
Chapter 1.
[ Q sits in the middle of nowwhere]
( in a winey voice) Q: I wanna piss someone off, but who should it be?
[ Q thinks very hard]
Q: Hmm, I cant bother Picard, he is an old grouchy Admiral. Ahh, Janeway would be nice.
( Q points to a bord floating in mid air)
~ Presenting your fave command team in Elementary school ( 8th grade)~
Kathryn Janeway as The Girl everyone looks upto
Tom Paris as The Bad A$$ kid
B'Elanna Torres as The A+ student goody-good girl.
Tuvok as The science wiz kid
Chakotay as The guy everyone hangs with
Seven as The (I'm trying to say a bad word but can't)
Harry Kim as The Band Geek
Doctor as The Druggie
Neelix as The teacher.
( Janeway, Tom, B'Elanna, Tuvok, Chakotay, Seven and the Doctor sit on a pic nic table at recess.)
Doctor: Yo, Janeway! Try some of this.
Janeway: No freaking way.
Tom: Pass it over here.
( Tom has a drag of the douby the Doc had.)
B'Elanna: You too should not be smoking o school grounds. The Mr. Neelix is gonna catch you.
Tom: Who cares.
( Harry comes to the pic nic table playing his Clarinet)
Harry: Hey, ya ll. Hey, Tom! You should not be smoking.
Tom: Well, I am.
( Harry walks away)
Seven: Tom, pass it over here!
( Tom passes the douby to Seven)
Janeway: SEVEN!
Seven: What, its fun! Try it.
Janeway: No.
Seven: Well, its not like your the Captain of the groupe.
( Tuvok bursts out laughing. Mr. Neelix comes to the pic nic table.)
Mr. Neelix: Who started this smoking?
(no one answears)
Mr. Neelix: If the guilty one does not come faward then I'll call all your parents and you'll be suspended.
( No one says anything.... except Tuvok! Who is still laughing.)
Mr. Neelix: Fine. Have it your way. I'm calling all your parents.
To my office NOW.
Did you like it?
Have any Suddgestions?
Last edited by Melodramatic on Sun Jul 27, 2003 11:24 pm; edited 2 times in total
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Ronevick The King
Joined: 23 May 2003 Posts: 11428 Location: (609), New Jersey
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Mon Jul 21, 2003 6:14 pm |
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LOL its a good start write more!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
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Mon Jul 21, 2003 6:18 pm |
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Yeah, I'll write more very soon.
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Josi Rockholt Fleet Admiral
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Mon Jul 21, 2003 6:57 pm |
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Please do.
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shrek man Whiz Kid
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Mon Jul 21, 2003 7:30 pm |
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Very nice... Can't wait for more.
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Tech Rear Admiral
Joined: 12 Apr 2003 Posts: 3476 Location: U.S.S. Galaxia
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 7:55 am |
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Good story. I like it. Please continue.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 8:22 am |
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It's not in especially much in character, but then again... I guess it's not supposed to.
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Abby diann Admiral
Joined: 15 Jul 2001 Posts: 7672 Location: galvaston tx
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 8:43 am |
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thi is good keep it up!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
Joined: 04 Feb 2003 Posts: 4577
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 9:29 am |
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Well, I admit the characters are not really as you actually know them on Voyager.
I am just changing it alittle (Well, obviously note to myself.)
I just thought that I would try and make the characters, the way they probally would be today.
I am working on more.
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Abby diann Admiral
Joined: 15 Jul 2001 Posts: 7672 Location: galvaston tx
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 9:44 am |
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well that is good i like how it is going!
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Ronevick The King
Joined: 23 May 2003 Posts: 11428 Location: (609), New Jersey
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 10:46 am |
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(Starts sweating.)
C'Mon..C'Mon...write, write, and write more! lol
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
Joined: 04 Feb 2003 Posts: 4577
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 12:27 pm |
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Ronevick wrote: | (Starts sweating.)
C'Mon..C'Mon...write, write, and write more! lol |
Lol.
It might take me 3 days cause I am also writting something else which its dead line is in 3 days. So after I am done with the thing I am working on now I'll post the story.
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Abby diann Admiral
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 12:52 pm |
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ok cool i guess i can wait....
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 1:43 pm |
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I'll try to maybe have it done sooner... I think I am going to write alonger chapter. LOl
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 2:33 pm |
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Dana Scully wrote: | Well, I admit the characters are not really as you actually know them on Voyager.
I am just changing it alittle (Well, obviously note to myself.)
I just thought that I would try and make the characters, the way they probally would be today.
I am working on more. |
Well, one has to take under consideration that they're not grown-up yet...
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Abby diann Admiral
Joined: 15 Jul 2001 Posts: 7672 Location: galvaston tx
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Tue Jul 22, 2003 2:37 pm |
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^^^ yeah that is true!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
Joined: 04 Feb 2003 Posts: 4577
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 8:23 pm |
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Well, I decided to write it and post it early.
I am bored as hell at the moment, so I'll post it and see what ya all think.
Chapter 2.
[ Q sits their. ]
Q: Hmm, not were talking.
( Tom, Janeway, B’Elanna, Tuvok, Chakotay, Seven, Harry, Doctor and Neelix sit in the principals office)
Harry: God, why did you hve to get caught? They think I was their doing it with you.
My mom is gonna kill me.
Tom: Relax,Harry.
Harry: Your telling me to *beep* relaix? How the hell can I?
Tom: I’ll just say we asked you and you refused and walked away. The actual truth.
Harry: Yeah, nice one their, like they would believe you.
Chakotay: Well arguing is not going to make this all go away. Just shut the hell up and deal with it.
Janeway: Well, your one to talk.
( Chakotay stands up so does Janeway)
Chakotay: What the hell is that supose to mean?
Janeway: What the hell do you think it means?
Chakotay: Don’t push it.
Janeway: Push what?.....
( Chakotay throws a punch at Janeway and misses)
Harry: Stop fighting. Geez..
B’Elanna: Yeah, harry is wright. This wont accomplish anything.
( With Tuvok still laughing as hell)
Mr. Neelix: Knock it off. I called each of your parents and they will be coming to pick you up. And you will all be suspended for 3 days.
( Tuvok laughs even louder)
Mr. Neelix: God, Tuvok must be really stoned.
Seven & Tuvok: Indeed.
Mr. Neelix: As I was saying your partents are coming so get ready, get all your homweork.
Be back in 10 mins.
( Janeway, Chakotay, Tom, Harry, B’Elanna, Doctor and Tuvok head toward all their classes ad get their home work.)
Seven: Man, I’ll get in no trouble at all.
B’Elanna: I will. But I did not even do anything...
Tom: Quit your wining B’Elanna.
B’Elanna: Oh, and I supose your gonna make me?
Tom: Oh, well yes.
( Then Tom and B’Elanna start making out, Janeway and Chakotay start, Seven and Harry start it, and Tuvok sits their laughing at them all)
( 9 mins later they arrive down stairs)
Tuvok: This is so funny.
Tuvok’s Mom: Now, it might be, but when we get home it wont be.
( The smile wipes off Tuvoks face)
B’Elanna: Dad, I did not do anything.
B’Elanna’s Dad: I believe you.
( Then they all leave...)
Q: I wonder whats gonna happen to Tuvok?
Is it any good?
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Abby diann Admiral
Joined: 15 Jul 2001 Posts: 7672 Location: galvaston tx
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 8:54 pm |
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yes it is i want to see what all their parents say!!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 9:53 pm |
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Really?
I was just gonne skip to them chatting on msn.
Well, I'll post what the other parents say tommrow.
But I am glad your still fan.
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Abby diann Admiral
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 10:10 pm |
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ok good and i will always be the #1 fan!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 10:15 pm |
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LOL
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 11:36 pm |
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Here is the stuff that went on at home.
What Happened at Home
[ Kathryn Janeway’s House ]
Kathryn : Mom, Dad I swear I was not smoking.
Mother: I believe you Kathryn. Really.
Dad: Well, I don’t believe her at all!
Mother: Well, I don’t care. I believe she did no do it. And look at her she does not look stoned and I don’t smell it off of her, so why do you think she did?
Dad: I think she did it cause of that god damn kid Tom.
Kathryn : *beep* off Dad. Don’t you dare talk about tom like that.
Dad: Well, Kathryn your grounded.
Mother: No, she will not be crounded, she did nothing wrong.
Dad: Fine, but you are forbidden to hang around with Tom.
Kathryn: No, I’ll hang with him if I want. Plus its not Tom that started it! It was the Doc.
Dad: Bull *beep*.
( Kathryn gets mad and runs to her room.)
[ Tom Paris’s House ]
Mother: Tom, did you start this?
Tom: Well, Yes and no.
Dad: What the hell do you mean yes/no. Either you did or didn’t.
Tom: Go to hell Dad.
Dad: Is this what you want! Being expelled? And now you Mr. Neelix is charging you with possession of drugs. Dammit, boy your heading in the wrong direction.
Tom: Actually, it is what I want to shut the hell up and stay out of it. Its my busniess.
Mother: We are just trying to help you.
Tom: Mom, I now you are, but Dad’s just making a big deal out of this cause it makes him look bad.
Dad: Not true.
Mother: BS, we now its true.
Dad: Well, your grounded.
Tom: Whatever.
Mother: I think we should talk to him, not punish him.
Dad: HE WILL BE PUNISHED.
( Tom goes to his room, and browses the net..)
[ B’Elanna Torres’s house ]
B’Elanna: Dad, I did nothing wrong.
Dad: I believe you.
B’Elanna: You believe me?
Dad: Well, yes. I don’t think you would do something like that. And if you were to then it would not be on school grounds.
B’Elanna: Yeah, that’s for sure.
Dad: Well, I’d like you to do some homework.
B’Elanna: Ok, Dad.
( Then B’Elanna goes and does some homework, then goes on the computer.)
[ Tuvoks Home ]
( Tuvok still laughing............)
Mom: Tuvok, I am very disapointed in you.
I cant believe you would behave in such a manner.
Dad: Yes, that was very wrong.
Mother: Indeed
Tuvok: Well, I know its wrong....LOL
Dad: Well, can you stop laughing and be searious about this.
Tuvok: Not really. LOL.
Mother: There is just no getting through to you is their?
Dad: Well, of caurse we cant get through to him now, he is stoned.
Mother: Where did I go wrong in rasing you, Tuvok?
Tuvok: LOL. You just cant rais worth *beep*. LOL.
Dad: Don’t speak to your mom like that.
Tuvok: Whatever.LOL
Dad: I wont tolerate this.
Tuvok: You don’t seem to have much of a choice. LOL!
Mother: STOP LAUGHING.
Tuvok: LOL! No. LOL!
Dad: Well, I don’t want you to be hanging with any of those freaky friends.
Got it?
Tuvok: I am not lisstening. Those are my friends.
Mother: You will not hang with them:
Tuvok: LOL, *beep* you..
( Then Tuvok went to his room and went on his MSN messanger)
[ Chakotay’s House ]
Chakotay: Ok, fine. I did it.
Mother: I don’t believe that.
Dad: Neither do I.
Chakotay: Well, I don’t care if you believe or not believe me.
Mother: Well, you are not going to be punished.
Dad: You will be doing extra chors for getting suspended.
Mother: Good idea.
Chakotay: Whatever .......................
Dad: Get busy.
Chakotay: No, I’ll do them after.
Dad: Fine, but make sure they are done soon.
Chakotay: Ok, whatever.
[ Seven’s House ]
Mother: What the hell were you thinking?
Seven: Mom?
Mother: I mean freaking smokin up with Tom.
Seven: Well it was pretty fun.
Mother: I don’t wanna here that.
Seven: Well, too bad.
Mother: Why did you do it?
Seven: Cause I wanted to. I felt like it.
Mother Well, your not to do it ever again.
Seven: You cant stop me.
Mother: Oh, yes I can.
Seven: No.
Mother: I’ll make sure you don’t.
Seven: You cant do this.
Mother: Acutally you would be amaized to what I can do.
Seven: Whatever,
Mother: Your grounded for 2 months, restricted from all fun, and you are to do all the chors.
Seven: You cant change me hanging with my friends
Mother: Oh, watch me.
Seven: Well, you might find it hard.
Mother: Oh?
Seven: We are in all the same classes.
Mother: I’ll change the school you fo to.
Seven: Mom, its neer the end of the year, you cant do that.
Mother: Up stairs to your room NOW.
Sevem: Fine.
( Seven went to her soom. She got angry and threw some things around.
Then she went on the computer.)
[ Harry Kim’s House ]
Harry: Mom, I am gonna say this once and once only.
I DID NOT DO ANYTHING.
Mother: Liar.
Harry: Its true.
I went to the picnic table where they were sitting and then I saw them smoking.
Then I left and went to play the Clarinet.
Mother: Well, I am not sure what to believe.
Harry: Believe me.
Mother: Well you better not start smoking.
Harry: I wont.
Mother: I don’t want you to be hanging with Tom anymore.....
Harry: *beep* you mom. I’ll hang with him If I cant. He is my best friend.
Mother: You will do what I tell you.
Harry: And your telling me to stop hanging with my friend. BEST FRIEND.
Mother: Yes, go to your room
Harry: Fine
( Then Harry goes to his room and plays the Clarinet)
( Goes on the computer)
[ Doctor’s House ]
Doc: Hi Mom.
Mother: Hey.
So I heard you were smoking up?
Doctor: Yup.
Mother: Good for you!
Your turning out like your father.
Doc: Well, I try.
Mother: Well, your doing good.
Doc: Thanx.
Mother: Well, I better get your lawyer back!
You might be needing him.
Doc: Yeah, porbally.
Mother: Yeah.
Doc: I wont take the drugs to school.
Mother: Well, good.
Doc: Besides, they probally will be having cops searching the lockers.
Mother: Yeah.
Doc: Yup.
Mother: Well, please get your homework.
Doc: Why?
Mother: I’ll do it.
Doc: Okay......
Any good?
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Abby diann Admiral
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 11:42 pm |
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very good keep it up
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tom_88_2 Commodore
Joined: 03 Mar 2003 Posts: 1561 Location: United States
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Wed Jul 23, 2003 11:47 pm |
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thats so funny
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Josi Rockholt Fleet Admiral
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Thu Jul 24, 2003 12:21 am |
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Next chapter please. Really good.
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