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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Wed Jan 08, 2003 7:05 pm My poetry |
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I have recently started writing poetry in class when I am bored(it is not very good). But I guess I will share- I will post more latter.
How could one do this
I used to think
now sitting here in red;
shunning actions that I do
not one my heart and head;
far from here I am
looking in through glass,
wondering what happened here
to break the mirror new
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~Alanna~
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janewaykat Vice Admiral
Joined: 14 May 2002 Posts: 5780 Location: Basketball court and college
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Wed Jan 08, 2003 9:39 pm |
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whats wrong with that its much better than i could do GOOD JOB
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Wed Jan 08, 2003 10:15 pm |
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Well thank you.
This stanza can stand alone or go after the first one
Heart and hand yet reaching out
To hold the hand in need,
Energy yet flowing through
To break the bonds of greed;
Shinning a brilliant bright
The lonely heart does do,
To leand and listen
Mend its own;
And mend doors of need
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~Alanna~
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Seven of Nine Sammie's Mammy
Joined: 16 Jun 2001 Posts: 7871 Location: North East England
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 4:38 am |
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Beautiful
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 1:41 pm |
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very good Wonderful poems!!
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Don't Create Your Own Shadows
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Josi Rockholt Fleet Admiral
Joined: 29 Dec 2001 Posts: 10136 Location: Boston, Ma
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 5:51 pm |
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Exactly, what's wrong with them?They're beautiful and a lot better than I could do.
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 6:15 pm |
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Well, I don't think that they are very good, but I guess you peoples do not really agree
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 8:39 pm |
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The golden sun is setting down
Upon the golden pond
Simple sounds yet ringing through
The stillness does it lay,
Beyond the bourne
Of hope it rises
Golden is the sun;
Glistning skys
to mark their own;
Setting sadness
To dark doth lay
Intrepid does it keep;
Behind and under
Wonder bourne
Untill the sadness lay
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
~Alanna~
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 10:26 pm |
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flowers flying untill the sky
to reach thy hand doth sun,
keeping rays not blankets through
where blankes covor need;
darkness keeping, hide doth pain
only hands can heal
but holding down the blankets do
keep far from hands of light
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
~Alanna~
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janewaykat Vice Admiral
Joined: 14 May 2002 Posts: 5780 Location: Basketball court and college
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Thu Jan 09, 2003 11:31 pm |
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getting better and better
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harry_kim Captain
Joined: 10 Dec 2002 Posts: 665 Location: Voyager
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Fri Jan 10, 2003 8:09 am |
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Those are excellent
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Jan 10, 2003 3:51 pm |
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Great
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Sun Jan 12, 2003 7:02 pm |
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Well Thank you everyone
Here is another
Until the sadness lay
the broken heart doth keep
the tears of tries
upsetting suns
beyond the bourne doth lay,
flowing full of flowers stay
the stillness meadow keep;
holding sounds of nature cry
to sooth the shattred soul,
patterned blankets deemed by time
to covor all and heal
all the woundes exposed;
untill the sadness lay
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
~Alanna~
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Mon Jan 13, 2003 2:35 pm |
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I like the language style
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Thu Mar 06, 2003 8:52 pm |
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Black Whispers
Holding Head
in stillness does it lay
blanket covor
No silence keep
the darkness does it hear
to long to feal
the light to grace
embracment covor keep
redness touch
entrance thy soul
to reach thy hand not given
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
~Alanna~
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Thu Mar 06, 2003 8:54 pm |
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Voy_Girl wrote: | I like the language style |
Thanks
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Mar 07, 2003 8:33 am |
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The new one is good, too
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Fri Mar 07, 2003 8:41 am |
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Thanks
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~Smooth Seas do not make skillfull sailors~
~Alanna~
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The_Doctor Lieutenant Commander
Joined: 25 Feb 2003 Posts: 339
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Sun Mar 09, 2003 1:17 pm Love 'em |
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Love 'em, there really great!
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-_-VoyagerFanatic-_- Rear Admiral
Joined: 20 Jun 2002 Posts: 4126
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Mon Mar 10, 2003 4:57 am |
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nuthin wrong as far as i can see... great poems
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[First Time back online in 3 years]
For i dipped into the future
Far as the human eye could see
Saw the vision of the world
And all wonder that would be
-Alfred Lord Tennyson [Quote on Voyager's dedication plaque]
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Starbuck faster...
Joined: 19 Feb 2003 Posts: 8715 Location: between chaos and melody
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Thu Mar 27, 2003 9:02 pm |
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lovely poems 5thhouse my fellow poet who writes much better than i do because no one understands my poems
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Seven of Nine Sammie's Mammy
Joined: 16 Jun 2001 Posts: 7871 Location: North East England
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Fri Mar 28, 2003 3:39 am |
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Beautiful as always, Lanna!
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