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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Mon Dec 16, 2002 2:17 pm Poem of Love and Pain |
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I wrote this poem after watching Resolutions for first time. Please tell me what you think of it. Any comments or ideas on changes would be of most help to me
Masks of Desire
Why must I hide my love for you behind this masquerade of
Protocol and Regulations,
My heart calls your name but dies away because of
Pain from pushing you away,
I want to feel your gentle loving touch again upon
My body
But these masks that I wear over my heart conceals the desire
That is burning in my soul for you.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Mon Dec 16, 2002 3:00 pm |
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Lovely
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Mon Dec 16, 2002 4:43 pm |
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Thanks Voy_Girl
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:42 pm |
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You're welcome... Got any other poems?
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Wed Dec 18, 2002 12:23 am |
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[b] b] Here you go
Hearts of Ice
Hearts on fire with passion can quickly turn cold as night becomes day
Hearts filled with love can quickly turn cruel as
Months becomes years
Hearts that instruct with honor can quickly turn ruthless as strength becomes weakness
Hearts of ice are all that is left of you and I.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Wed Dec 18, 2002 8:43 am |
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VER y nice!
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Wed Dec 18, 2002 6:30 pm |
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Thanks
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shrek man Whiz Kid
Joined: 14 Jan 2002 Posts: 5519
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Wed Dec 18, 2002 7:39 pm |
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Very nice.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Thu Dec 19, 2002 3:56 pm |
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I like your poems Chakotays angel....
what inspires you?
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Thomas Pool Princess
Joined: 08 Jul 2001 Posts: 19730 Location: Manchester
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Thu Dec 19, 2002 3:59 pm |
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They're great.
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Fri Dec 20, 2002 2:15 pm |
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Voy_Girl, What inspires me to write poems is the love and the hardships of life in the world. I wrote these poems as if they were from Janeway point of view. I'm glad you like my poems and will post a new one really soon.
Last edited by Chakotays Angel on Fri Dec 20, 2002 2:24 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Fri Dec 20, 2002 2:23 pm |
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Here is a new one that I wrote last night after I watched Coda.
Magic of love
Love has a very special magic
Two hearts that have never touched
Are brought together
Two souls that yearn to be together
Are joined together
Two lovers that burn with passion
Are untied together
Love has the power of Magic
Flowing threw it.
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Thomas Pool Princess
Joined: 08 Jul 2001 Posts: 19730 Location: Manchester
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Fri Dec 20, 2002 2:28 pm |
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Yay! We love J/C!!!
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Dec 20, 2002 3:32 pm |
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Chakotays Angel wrote: | Voy_Girl, What inspires me to write poems is the love and the hardships of life in the world. I wrote these poems as if they were from Janeway point of view. I'm glad you like my poems and will post a new one really soon. |
That's a good source of inspiration... I hope you write many more of the same quality as you uphold now
I like your newest piece too, btw!
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-_-VoyagerFanatic-_- Rear Admiral
Joined: 20 Jun 2002 Posts: 4126
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Sat Dec 21, 2002 12:16 pm |
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chocho_11 wrote: | Yay! We love J/C!!! |
lol
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For i dipped into the future
Far as the human eye could see
Saw the vision of the world
And all wonder that would be
-Alfred Lord Tennyson [Quote on Voyager's dedication plaque]
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Sat Dec 21, 2002 4:06 pm |
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^You too, VF?
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Mon Dec 23, 2002 5:47 pm |
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A new one
Moonlight on Roses
As the delicate rose buds bloom when kissed by a moon beam
As the gentle light caress the beautiful buds during a soft summer night
Only the moonlight and the gentle night can make these roses bloom to life
Just like your gentle touch makes my heart bloom with the love for you.
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Mon Dec 23, 2002 5:49 pm |
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Another one
Star crossed
Lovers who can�t be together
Hearts that cry out for each other at night
Souls that burn with the fires of passion
Arms that arch to caress each others bodies
Died slowly in each others arms
They are called Star crossed.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Tue Dec 24, 2002 3:57 am |
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aww.... so very sweet these are!!
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Thomas Pool Princess
Joined: 08 Jul 2001 Posts: 19730 Location: Manchester
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Tue Dec 24, 2002 8:22 am |
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Very nice.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Wed Dec 25, 2002 3:19 pm |
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hope there's many more...
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Thu Dec 26, 2002 5:40 pm |
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there will be many more real soon
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 8:15 am |
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good will be waiting..
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Thu Jan 02, 2003 3:47 pm |
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Here it is
Angel Tears
The gentle rain falls upon my window pane
Winter snow swiral around my lonely heart
Dew drops dance on the petals of the last summer rose
You and I parted so saddly without a last kiss
Our love will live on forever in our lonely hearts
Like Angel tears from Heaven.
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Thu Jan 02, 2003 3:55 pm |
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one more
Forever Goodbye to Our Love
You said the you would love me till the end
but now the end has come for us
I loved you with all my heart
but you shattered it like glass upon the ground
We parted so bitterly towards each other
but now we know there was no really love for each other
So Forever goodbye to our love
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