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Captian_Janeway Lieutenant Commander
Joined: 27 Jul 2002 Posts: 283 Location: Terra
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Fri Oct 18, 2002 11:24 am From the Bottom of a Broken Heart |
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This is a poem form my broken heart, and i hope you enjoy it. i have written a couple of stories, and i thought, Why not give poetry a shot? well here goes.
[i]A lonely breeze carasses my cheek,
I look out my window and see a tiny boat at sea,
and realize that boat is just like me,
alone,
with only the mind to confort,
only the soft song of lonliness to lull me to sleep,
no bells of joy,
only cries to fill the ears,
no light of love,
only sadness to fill the heart,
no flowers of hapiness,
only bitterness to fill the soul,
and shades of greyto fill the eyes.
An eagle flies but my heart cries, 13
I look to the world for the answers,
and look to myself to see what really matters,
for the past is life's greatest mystery,
only the wise and strong of heart con solve,
but my heart is tattered and torn,
only a shread of identity to seek the truth,
and a well of self pity from wich I shall draw my strength,
for many a times have tears touched my cheek,
and for each love lost I shall weep,
the lies and falsehoods can no longer hide the truth,
and with all that I am,
all the I shall be,
I shall find it and bring back tears of joy to my broken heart.[/i]
What do you think? I just wrote this, and look forward to hearing your thoughts.
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"Life will always have shadows, so try to find the light."
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Captian_Janeway Lieutenant Commander
Joined: 27 Jul 2002 Posts: 283 Location: Terra
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Fri Oct 18, 2002 11:25 am Re: From the Bottom of a Broken Heart |
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[quote="Captian_Janeway"]This is a poem form my broken heart, and i hope you enjoy it. i have written a couple of stories, and i thought, Why not give poetry a shot? well here goes.
[i]A lonely breeze carasses my cheek,
I look out my window and see a tiny boat at sea,
and realize that boat is just like me,
alone,
with only the mind to confort,
only the soft song of lonliness to lull me to sleep,
no bells of joy,
only cries to fill the ears,
no light of love,
only sadness to fill the heart,
no flowers of hapiness,
only bitterness to fill the soul,
and shades of greyto fill the eyes.
An eagle flies but my heart cries,
I look to the world for the answers,
and look to myself to see what really matters,
for the past is life's greatest mystery,
only the wise and strong of heart con solve,
but my heart is tattered and torn,
only a shread of identity to seek the truth,
and a well of self pity from wich I shall draw my strength,
for many a times have tears touched my cheek,
and for each love lost I shall weep,
the lies and falsehoods can no longer hide the truth,
and with all that I am,
all the I shall be,
I shall find it and bring back tears of joy to my broken heart.[/i]
What do you think? I just wrote this, and look forward to hearing your thoughts.[/quote]
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"Life will always have shadows, so try to find the light."
--Cassandra
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Captian_Janeway Lieutenant Commander
Joined: 27 Jul 2002 Posts: 283 Location: Terra
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Fri Oct 18, 2002 11:26 am |
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Sorry I double posted.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Oct 18, 2002 3:41 pm |
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Very nice, and deep, poem.
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5thhouse Rear Admiral
Joined: 05 May 2002 Posts: 3842 Location: Santa Barbara, California
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Fri Oct 18, 2002 5:44 pm |
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Thats good
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Captian_Janeway Lieutenant Commander
Joined: 27 Jul 2002 Posts: 283 Location: Terra
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Tue Oct 22, 2002 9:17 am |
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Thank-you. I got dumped and wrote this.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Sun Oct 27, 2002 8:57 am |
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That's sad, but it explains the poem.
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Lxe keep dreaming
Joined: 11 Aug 2002 Posts: 3622 Location: stv
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Thu Feb 27, 2003 9:43 am |
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very beautiful Captain_Janeway.
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Josi Rockholt Fleet Admiral
Joined: 29 Dec 2001 Posts: 10136 Location: Boston, Ma
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Thu Feb 27, 2003 9:46 am |
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It's beautiful.Good job.
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Chakotays Angel Captain
Joined: 04 Nov 2002 Posts: 776 Location: Twin Falls Idaho
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Thu Feb 27, 2003 5:06 pm |
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Beautiful and Strong with emotions
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Matrix881 Captain
Joined: 19 Feb 2003 Posts: 520
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Thu Feb 27, 2003 9:47 pm |
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Nice Beautiful Poem
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ussshorty Commodore
Joined: 30 Aug 2002 Posts: 1678 Location: in space,in the middle of nowhere
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Sat Mar 22, 2003 5:12 am |
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buetiful brings a tear to my eye
theres a britney song called 'from the bottom of my broken heart'.
but this poem is way better than that song
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ezri dax no.1 enemie
Tealc:He is concealing somthing
O'neill:yeah like what?
Tealc:im unsure because hes concealing it
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janewaykat Vice Admiral
Joined: 14 May 2002 Posts: 5780 Location: Basketball court and college
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Sat Mar 22, 2003 10:59 am |
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It's really good
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ussshorty Commodore
Joined: 30 Aug 2002 Posts: 1678 Location: in space,in the middle of nowhere
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Sat Mar 22, 2003 12:05 pm |
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i agree there really should be more talent like this and thank god the star trek voyager site hs talent.
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ezri dax no.1 enemie
Tealc:He is concealing somthing
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Tealc:im unsure because hes concealing it
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Sat Mar 22, 2003 1:59 pm |
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True..
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ussshorty Commodore
Joined: 30 Aug 2002 Posts: 1678 Location: in space,in the middle of nowhere
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Sun Mar 23, 2003 10:15 am |
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at least the ppl on this site write their own stuff and makes sure it comes from their head cause some ppl actually have the cheek to go to a fanfiction site and nick summin from there.
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'VOTE KATHRYN JANEWAY FOR PRESIDANT'
ezri dax no.1 enemie
Tealc:He is concealing somthing
O'neill:yeah like what?
Tealc:im unsure because hes concealing it
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Mon Mar 24, 2003 3:06 pm |
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ussshorty wrote: | at least the ppl on this site write their own stuff and makes sure it comes from their head cause some ppl actually have the cheek to go to a fanfiction site and nick summin from there. |
yeah, That's an awful thing to do! It's offending to the real writer!
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