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PostTue Nov 30, 2004 8:13 pm    Sometimes.... (a poem)

Sometimes... when I'm all alone, I cry because I'm different
Sometimes... after a fight with someone I love, I cry because they're gone
Sometimes... when its dark, I pretend that I can fly
Sometimes... when I'm asleep, I dream about you
Sometimes... when I'm alone, I cry because you don't like me
Sometimes... when I'm afraid, I hug my blanket tight
Sometimes... when I'm sad, I say things I don't mean
Sometimes... when I feel abandoned, I get defensive and mean
Sometimes, just sometimes, I know that I'm alone


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IntrepidIsMe
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PostWed Dec 01, 2004 4:48 pm    

Wow, it's good. Pretty powerful,


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"Nelly, I am Heathcliff! He's always, always in my mind: not as a pleasure, any more than I am always a pleasure to myself, but as my own being."

-Wuthering Heights

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Starbuck
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PostWed Dec 01, 2004 5:24 pm    

Thank you aaron

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Micteth-Son of Udas
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PostTue Dec 14, 2004 11:44 am    

not bad
as a writer of poems my self i sugest that you change this one word :
tight
to :
tightly

gives it a bit of ryme to it


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