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Starbuck faster...
Joined: 19 Feb 2003 Posts: 8715 Location: between chaos and melody
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Tue Nov 30, 2004 8:13 pm Sometimes.... (a poem) |
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Sometimes... when I'm all alone, I cry because I'm different
Sometimes... after a fight with someone I love, I cry because they're gone
Sometimes... when its dark, I pretend that I can fly
Sometimes... when I'm asleep, I dream about you
Sometimes... when I'm alone, I cry because you don't like me
Sometimes... when I'm afraid, I hug my blanket tight
Sometimes... when I'm sad, I say things I don't mean
Sometimes... when I feel abandoned, I get defensive and mean
Sometimes, just sometimes, I know that I'm alone
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IntrepidIsMe Pimp Handed
Joined: 14 Jun 2002 Posts: 13057 Location: New York
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Wed Dec 01, 2004 4:48 pm |
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Wow, it's good. Pretty powerful,
-------signature-------
"Nelly, I am Heathcliff! He's always, always in my mind: not as a pleasure, any more than I am always a pleasure to myself, but as my own being."
-Wuthering Heights
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Starbuck faster...
Joined: 19 Feb 2003 Posts: 8715 Location: between chaos and melody
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Wed Dec 01, 2004 5:24 pm |
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Thank you aaron
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Micteth-Son of Udas Klingon Warrior
Joined: 20 Jul 2002 Posts: 3202 Location: rite behind you!
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Tue Dec 14, 2004 11:44 am |
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not bad
as a writer of poems my self i sugest that you change this one word :
tight
to :
tightly
gives it a bit of ryme to it
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