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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 6:47 am Aliens amongst us |
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Aliens Amongst Us
Chapter 1
It was a warm and humid night in the small town of Georgia. I was watching tv all by myself. I kept hearing something outside. I got up and looked out the window. I didn't see anything, so I went back to watch tv.
Suddenly I get a phone call and I jumped up, like if I was scared.
On the phone, was my friend Mary. She wanted to go for a hay ride with some group of friends. I wanted to stay home but she convinced me to go.
As I was walking to my car, I kept hearing something behind me. I turned around and nothing was there. I got into my car and drove over to my friend Mary's house. As I arrived, there were her boyfriend, her cousin Arelene, and another friend Dixie.
We all hopped into her boyfriend's Rob's truck. We headed to the back roads towards base. When we arrived, there was a truck that seemed to be in a hurry to get away. Mary and I was like, let's go already. This is not a good idea.
Rob said'' Don't be cowards!'' He drove in the field where all the army tanks go through, which was in bunch of woods. It was dark and could hardly see. All of a sudden, Rob's truck ran over something, which blew out his tire. We all got out. Mary and I raised hell with him cause he didn't have a spare tire.
Mary and I heard something. Rob thought we was hearing things. We paniced. Rob wanted to ignore it.
All of sudden there was this light up ahead. We couldn't make out what was coming close. So we started walking back towards the road. As we was walking, something or someone was standing with a huge weapon of some sort. Mary and I screamed like hell. Rob wanted to be all muncho so he decided to go near the person or thing.
It was an army soldier, he yelled out. '' You can not come through here. It is dangerous and this is for army personel. Rob replied'' My tire is flat. So the army soldier helped them. He put a tire on and told them to watch out. There is some alien that had crashed.
Mary and I was like, WOW! Where? The army soldier replied'' Out by Hollow Grove RD. And we turned and looked at each other. '' Debra : That is on my road.''
So the army soldier took Debra, Rob, Mary, her cousin and another friend back to Mary's house.
They went into Mary's house and started talking. Rob heard a bang outside. He went to check it out. But, he didn't come back in.
When the girls noticed they paniced. They all went outside to get Mary's car but they saw Rob dead on her hood.
They was scared to deaf. And behind them was an alien. They felt like if something was behind them and they looked back. There the alien was and sprayed some kind of gas, to make them sleep.
(I will finish this later on today. I don't know if it is interesting but i work on it though and I need to work on my grammar too.)
Last edited by Leo Wyatt on Wed Jul 06, 2005 9:03 am; edited 3 times in total
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nadia cookie
Joined: 08 Apr 2005 Posts: 8560 Location: Australia
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:28 am |
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It's really good Deb!
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:38 am |
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i have to change the name of the story to Alien amongst us? Or leave it as it is?
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nadia cookie
Joined: 08 Apr 2005 Posts: 8560 Location: Australia
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:39 am |
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I would leave it...cause it'll be a suprise to ppl who read it
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:39 am |
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ok.
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:57 am |
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Debra, Mary, Dixie, and Arelene woke up upon the alien ship. They was not strapped in at all. Arelene cried and screamed. Mary and Debra tried to comfort her. But, Arelene was the one who seems to act like a scared baby of the group.
Debra got up and walked around. She found a door but it was locked. Mary said, '' It is useless Debra.''
Debra was not going to give in to defeat yet. There had to be away out. But, she gave up for a little while. The alien walked in and they paniced.
The Alien spoke, '' Don't be alarm. I am not going to hurt you.''
Debra turned and looked at her friends and then looked back at the alien.
Debra said,'' If you don't plan to hurt us, then why kidnap us?
The alien replied and said.'' You are the chosen ones.''
Debra replied, '' What do you mean the chosen ones?''
( again I am not through. )
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Otter Fleet Admiral
Joined: 12 Oct 2004 Posts: 12895 Location: England
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 10:17 am |
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well Deb, I'm stund. thats a Cool bit of work, well done.
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 10:36 am |
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Thanks. I only begun. I will finish it sooner or later. I am on a ball. Still thinking on the next scene.
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Thu Jun 30, 2005 10:49 am |
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The alien replied,'' You are chosen to save your planet and others. There is an dangerous group of Aliens called the Grommoar and they are after one thing only.
Debra replied,'' And what would that be?''
The alien replied,'' To conquor the Universe and have humans and aliens as slaves.''
After awhile the friends thought this was one big dream and that they will wake up in the morning. But, it was real and they not sure about what the alien had told them.
Debra and the crew followed the alien when he ask for them to follow. They got a tour of the ship and his crew. When the alien told his helms man to set a course and named a human like ship, the girls got curious.
Debra thought, '' Our people know that they was aliens and keeping it secret.''
But little did Debra know that the alien could read her thoughts and he replied, '' I have more to tell you.''
We are here to make sure humans come to the technology that they can travel through space.
'' Debra: HA! We are trying to find ways. And the alien replied,'' You have not been successful either. We must set the plan in motion.
(Not through yet. taking another brain storm break.)
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Tue Jul 05, 2005 7:34 am |
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The alien let the humans roam the ship but with guards. Debra and the others was annoyed with guards with the pointy ears. '' Debra: You know, you don't have to escort us. We're obivously not going anywhere.''
The two alien guards didn't say a word but kept following them.
They came to a room that looked a mess hall. Arelene said, '' This must be their kitchen. I am so starving. Lets get something.'' Debra and Mary looked at her, as if she has lost her human mind. But, they agreed anyway.
(I am not through)
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:24 am |
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As they walked in the mess hall, they found a table and sat down. Another alien came to them. Ask them to come get their tray. '' Debra replied,'' No, Thanks. We are not hungry. The alien with pointed ears said,'' It is not logical not to eat something. Debra and others decided to eat. It is not like they going to poison them.
Debra . Mary, Arlene, and Dixie went to get their food tray. Debra was giving insults about the food.'' Debra: This food is dull.''
(Still working on it. Please be patient with me.)
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zero Rear Admiral
Joined: 03 Apr 2005 Posts: 4566 Location: Texas
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Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:29 pm |
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So, are the aliens Vulcan? Or... something else. Maybe throw in a small description of them ... of thier home world ... things like that so we can get a better idea!
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Wed Jul 06, 2005 6:00 pm |
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You will find out sooon. Hold onto your horses
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zero Rear Admiral
Joined: 03 Apr 2005 Posts: 4566 Location: Texas
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Thu Jul 07, 2005 1:56 pm |
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Oh I wasn't trying to rush you or anything. I just wanted to know what the aliens looked like. I mean did they have 7 eyes and ears on top of thier heads? Or did they look like humans... were they scarry looking.... just that kinda stuff. It would make the story more interesting.
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Fri Jul 08, 2005 8:23 am |
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I am going to finish it soon. But, I am working on a better story. So one I am working on, is more in details. Better Grammar and spelling. But by Sunday this one will be done and I will start on my other one.
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zero Rear Admiral
Joined: 03 Apr 2005 Posts: 4566 Location: Texas
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Fri Jul 08, 2005 1:54 pm |
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^okie. Cool, can't wait to read it.
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ravenstar Lieutenant
Joined: 03 Jun 2004 Posts: 196 Location: at my mom's house
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Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:59 am |
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When are you going to finish it?
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Sun Jul 10, 2005 1:14 pm |
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When I get the energy up and feeling better.
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 4:09 am |
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The alien leader with the long pointed ears walked in and sat beside them. They looked at him and laughed. He replied, '' Laughter is highly form of emotion for you humans.''
Debra replied,'' Yes, it is. What is wrong with that?'' He replied,'' It is illogical to show emotions.''
They looked at him as if he lost his alien mind.
(Not through , I know be patient.)
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Leo Wyatt Sweetest Angel
Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 19045 Location: Investigating A Crime Scene. What did Quark do this time?
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 7:47 am |
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Can you lock this? It really is not going anywhere. It is boring. I need to work on something better. When I write something better and interesting I will post it.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 2:46 pm |
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Leo Wyatt wrote: | Can you lock this? It really is not going anywhere. It is boring. I need to work on something better. When I write something better and interesting I will post it. |
All right, I'll lock it. If you want it opened again, just say so.
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