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PostTue Jan 11, 2005 5:50 pm    Sabra Cat

okay I'm acctullu going to write this storie and get it published so i figured I'll put it on here plz comment and how I'm doing

Oh ya and All characters are all made up nobody in this is off a movie etc....



Chapter 1

Tim looked over his shoulder to see what Mike was doing behind him. Hey Mike can you help putting the deer in the back of the truck? Mike sweating went over to the deer, he looked at it for a while then Tim then came over. Mike looked up at him. So are you going to eat the deer or stuff it like all of your other ones Tim. Well lets see Mike of course I’m going to stuff it why not, I don’t have a stuffed deer yet? Mike sighed and rolled his eyes. Why don’t you just preserve the head and put it on the wall. Tim looked at him. Mike… The last time I did that I scarred my poor wife to death with it? Mike started to laugh. Remember in Collage Tim that bears head? Tim’s eyebrow went up and a grin went over his face. Oh yes I remember that you scarred Rhonda half to death like me with that deer. Tim then bent down and grabbed the deer’s front leg mike grabbed the back legs and both of lifted it toward the truck and put it on the box. Tim closed the boxes door and made sure it was locked shut so the deer didn’t come out while the were driving. I think its looked Tim? Said Mike as he went near the passenger side. Tim stood there for a moment then went to the driver’s side. Mike was already in the truck waiting for Tim. He then got in and turned the truck on.
In the bushes a creature was watching them talking inside the truck. The creature was Sabre Cat It is a slight bigger then a werewolf but yet it stood on its hind legs and had the arms as a werewolf. It hade longer fingers with long nails, its feet were the same. It hade a cat like tail plus its head was like a cat with its ears. The Sabre cat hade very long teeth alittle bit longer then a sabre tooth tigers teeth.
The Sabre cat is not like a werewolf thou, it has no human form it was a Cat demon. The Sabre cat still looked at the to talk. The cat sneered a bit. How long is the going to talk for? It said in mind. Back in the truck. Okay we should go now? Said Mike looking slowly over at him. Tim put his hands on the starring wheel. Um ya we should Rhonda is probably expecting me home an hour ago. The Sabre cat watched as the truck started to move and then went out of site. The cat then started to run after it. Tim looked at Mike. So Mike were do you want me to drop you off or do you want me to just bring you to your house? No I think I’ll walk from that corner store to my house Tim. Okay then. Tim said
A short hour later went by and Tim dropped Mike off at the corner store. See you tomorrow Mike! Ya you to Tim! As he closed the trucks door. The truck started to move and Mike happened to look at the back of the truck. What the Hey Tim! Tim! Hey… he then stopped shouting when he realized that Tim was already down the street. Oh man! He said to himself. Where did the deer go! The door is closed on the back? Mike then ran to his house.
Renee looked at her watch. Oh were is your father! He should have been here a while ago? Jessica put her book down. Well mom dad did go hunting with Tim? Renee put her head back on the chair. Jessica then heard the door open. Hi dad! She yelled. He took off his stuff and walked into the living room.
Hey sweetie, how are you…. He then looked at his wife. Hi honey! Renee brought her head up. Hi dear… So how was the hunting party? We got a deer but as soon as Tim dropped me off I looked back and the stiken deer was gone completely? Jessica gave her dad a look. Poofs out of no were dad? Well you can’t call him dear? And why not Renee? Cause… The phone is still not working?
Tim’s truck pulled up his driveway. And let me guess the garage door is still not working. He whispered to himself as he pushed the button to open the door. Nope doesn’t work… again! He then got out and went to the back of the truck, that’s when he realized it. Well were is the deer! I locked the door part and… Wait we never hit any bumps or anything. Tim paused for a while. Then he went over to the house. In mind well there goes the deer something must have took it, no that’s stupid nothing that strong can take a deer right out of the truck like that? Well I guess I have to tell Rhonda that we never caught anything but we almost. Tim then opened the door and walked inside he shut the door behind him; he took off his hat and jacket. Hey hone! Rhonda peeked over the other side of the wall. Long enough? She said. We didn’t catch anything that blows big time really. Tim didn’t want to lie to his wife but had to. What was he going to say to her that oh we got a deer we put it in the truck came here and noticed it was completely gone? Yeah okay…. Tim said as he worked his way to the kitchen. He started to make a coffee. You ready for tomorrow Tim? Said Rhonda as she came over to him and rested on the counter. He looked at her. Did or is the tent all right? Rhonda stood up straight then looked at him. Yes dear the tent is fine remember, I sewed that hole on the bottom. Not like last time, remember how much water came in and we got socked? Tim said as he then poured the hot water in the coffee cup and started to add the sugar and coffee. He then went to the kitchen table.


still writing there be more soon...........


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PostSat Jan 15, 2005 10:38 am    

Its very good, aside from your lack of punctuation and symbols, which bothered me. But thats because I'm a freak for the english language.

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PostMon Jan 17, 2005 4:37 pm    

Lol

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PostMon Jan 17, 2005 4:59 pm    

Next day.

Jessica can you help me by putting the stuff into the trunk of the car hone? Said Renee putting in the tents then went and picked up one of the lawn chairs. Jessica came over and picked up the other two lawn chairs. Mike came out of the house and walked over to the driver side of the car. Everything is in I think. Said Renee as she then closed the hatch and locked it. Jessica got into the backseat and closed her door; Mike was still standing outside of the car looking at his wife. Everything should be there I put some other things in along with the small grill and that? Mike then thought to himself about Tim. I wonder if Tim looked at the back of the truck yesterday, knowing him he probably freaked. Plus have to tell his wife that he lost it? Mike opened the car door slowly then he got in and closed it. Renee came to the other side and opened the door and got in. Dear what time did the Hartman’s go at? Mike looked at her as he was starting the car. They left at 5 O’clock this morning, there picking up their son at that school?

On the high way 8 o clock am
Rhonda looked at her watch and then looked back up on the highway. Tim felt guilty still for ling to his wife about the whole deer thing. He then looked in the mirror. So Jason how are you doing in that school? Jason looked up at his dad and smiled. Its great I passed a history test today. But it was weird thou. Rhonda gave a look. What’s so weird Jason? She said. Lets see having a sleep over at the school plus with the teacher Mr. Simpson? Well it was your last day they’re plus the teacher probably thought for yours to party for your last day yesterday? Said Tim as he looked then at his wife smiling. Well true dad. Said Jason. Jason then looked out his side of the window watching the cars and trucks go zooming by their truck. He wasn’t really excited about going camping with his mother or father. Last time they argued with another couple plus he had made friends with that couples daughter Samantha. Jason knew he liked her when they first meet each other while he was walking with Jessica to the lake. He started to blush a bit then he snaped out of it. He knew he wasn’t going to see Samantha anyways since his and her parents had a hairy with one another. Jason then looked at the back of his dads blond head. Tim was whistling while driving and his mother was just looking straight at the road as if she were a zombie. How long is it to their dad? Tim looked in the rear view mirror. Lets see, we left at 5 to pick you up we stopped at Aunt Martha’s place at 7 then now here we are at 8:15.We should get there at 12:00pm? Said Tim. 12:00!! Said Jason freaking. Tim laughed. No I was only joking, will get there at 10. Rhonda shocks her head and smiled. ……. Don’t you ever do that! Said Jason with relief. Tim laughed still. Jason gave a weak smile. Still I mean it! Jessica looked at Tim. Dear should we stop at the next corner store and wait for Mike and Renee? Tim looked at her in the corner of his eye and then looked back at the road. Yeah that would be a wise idea…why not sure. Jason looked out the window again. Hey I see a store comeing up? The truck then started to slow down and then it pulled into the driveway and parked into one of the parking spots. Tim turned of the truck and looked at the hood. Please say no? He said. What hone? Said Rhonda. Tim opened the door and the door kinda made a squeaking sound. He went to the hood and opened it. Rhonda and Jason got out and walked to the front of there truck. Yeah your right dad, please say no? Rhonda put her hand on Tim’s shoulder. He looked at her. We will be in the store okay? As she then started to walk away.


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PostSat Jan 22, 2005 10:51 am    

continuing.............


Tim smiled at her. Jason was already in the store,he looked at his watch and it said 8:30.
He then looked up and saw he’s mother come into the store. He then walked over to her. Hey mom can I have a icecream bar? Rhonda sighd. At eight thirty in the morning? Jason raised both eyebrows. I don’t think so Jason. He then rolled his eye’s. I’ll buy you one of those small boxes of cerel. And you don’t have to have it with milk ether.

Out side

Tim started to put new oil into the engine. Just then something went behind him really fast and into the bushes. He turned his head and looked at the bushes. What the heck was that? His eyes went to side to side of his head. There was nothing out her only dust that he saw blowing around on the highway. Then he saw a car pulling up into the driveway. Two adults came out with a teen. The man looked at Tim. Hey Tim! The man yelled. Um hey? Said Tim as he whispered it. Who the heck…. Said in his mind. The man came over to him. It’s me Tim Larry…from work? Tim’s lips went into a O. Oh hey Larry sorry I didn’t know it was you so sorry. Larry nodded. So were are you’s heading to? Tim looked at the bushes then at Larry.


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