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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sat Jan 03, 2004 3:50 pm The Rebells of StarFleet (13 and over) |
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The Legal Stuff...
Copyright 2004 Mark Gloade writing
The Charactes and Events in these writings are ficticious and any simularities are mere concidense
I have no rights to the Star Trek Characters, ships,weapons or anything else created by Paramount
Baised on 'Star Trek' Created by Gene Roddenberry
WARNING
If your under 13 you may not understand some topics used in this story, and i dont want any complaints from Admin, Mod or angry parents so that is why I put this warning here.
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Backround Story...
Many years have past since Voyager returned to the Alpha Quadrent. Tom and B'lanna Torres Raise their daughter on Boreth. B'lanna studies ancient Klingon Seremonys while Tom designs new ships for StarFleet. Both of them have aquired the rank of Commodore. Chakotay is still captain of Voyager, with the new protocol that Commodorea and above can choose to still command their ships. Tuvok still teaches at the Acadmey and has the rank of Rear Admeral. Harry has the rank of Captain and commands the NCC-1749 USS Aquataine, Soverion Class. Seven of Nine (known as Anakah Hudson) Has Graduated from the Acadmey with High Honnors and Seves and Chakotays first officer with the rank of Commander. Libby is still Libby, she is a spy and a muscian. Icheb and Naomi are engaged and have graduated from the Acadmey with High Honnors. Picard has Acheved the rank of Admeral and is the Captain of NCC-1701-E USS Enterprise-E Sovereion Class. Admeral Montgromy is still that cold old man. Weasly Crusher has Command of a Defiant Class destroyer and the rank of Captain, he has also become very close friends with Seven of Nine.
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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"Why Can't I?" Demanded a really mad Icheb "Why?"
"Because Mr.Icheb, we don't know what will happen when a ex-borg and a non borg mate" Admeral Montgromry replyed
"Can I atleast still marry her, just not have sex?" Icheb Asked
"Im sorry Icheb, you cant see Ms. Wildman any more" Montgromry repled "Dismissed"
"Yes Sir" Icheb responded and stormed out of Montgromy's office.
"Keith, why?" Inquired Admeral Janeway
"You only hold the rank of Vice Admeral, you have no rite to question my decisions, dismissed" Montgromy said as Janeway marched out of the door.
"How did it go?" asked Chakotay
"Not well, Icheb loves Naomi and that idiot wont let him see her!" Janeway responded.
"Well, like you I am only Vice Admeral, we cant do anything, lets contact Admeral Paris or Admeral Picard, mabye they can help us" Chakotay said as he took Janeway's hand and walked out of StarFleet HeadQuarters.
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sat Jan 03, 2004 8:37 pm |
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Chakotay and Janeway transported to the Enterprise and were greeted by Commander Geordi LaForge.
"Good Day Admerals, how may I help you?" Geordi asked
"Is Admeral Picard busy?" inquired Janeway
"No, not at the moment maim, what do you need him for?" asked Geordi
"We wish to talk to him Geordi, about a serious matter" Chakotay responded
"Commander LaForge to Admeral Picard" LaForge said tapping his comm badge
"Yes Geordi, what is it?" Picard asked
"Admeral, Admerals Chakotay and Janeway wish to speak to you" Gerodi responded
"Send them to my ready room, Picard out" Picard said, ending the transmission
"Go to his ready room" Geordi said
"Thank you Mr.LaForge" Chakotay said as they walked to the TurboLift.
"Deck 1, Bridge" Janeway said and the TurboLift took off.
"Kathryn, whats wrong" Chakotay said sensing something in Janeway
"Chakotay, we have been apart recently and the last time we were alone was..." Janeway began
"Was the last time we were in a TurboLift" Chakotay said teasing Janeway
"No, on that alien planet where if we left we would die" Janeway said
"Well, if I remember correctly we were getting close" Chakotay responded
"Yes, Chakotay I miss times like that" Janeway responded
"I know" Chakotay said before kissing Janeway. The TurboLift doors opeded as the 2 Admerals took one step away from one another. They walked to the ready room and the doors opened up. A bald man was facing them. He had cofident blue eyes, with just a hint of impulseness and he was bald.
"Ahh, Kathryn, Chakotay what is your problem?" asked Admeral Jean-Luc Picard
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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"Jean-Luc, one of my former crewmen is not allowed to see a Ms. Naomi Wildman, because he is a ex-borg" Janeway said
"Montgromy has already brefed me on what happened, and he also told me that you would be coming to see me and Admeral Paris" Picard began "But I wish to help, its not his place to decide peoples relationships"
"What can we do? Montgromy is the head of StarFleet" Chakotay responded
"We, I don't know, we all are facing a court marshal for this conversasion anyways" Picard said
"Admeral Picard" saida filmilar android voice "Admeral Paris is here to see you"
"Send him in here B4" Picard said. Admeal Owen Paris appeard in the door with Commodore Tom Paris by his side.
"Good that you are here Kathryn and Chakotay, my son has a plan..."Paris began...
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sun Jan 04, 2004 5:38 pm |
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"Allright Tom, whats your plan?" Chakotay inquired
"Well, I have a ship perfect for Icheb, I modified the Defiant class and made it as strong as a soverion" Tom began "I call it the Galaxia Class, It has 12 torpedo launchers, 10 phaser banks, 1 Photonic Cannon, 2 Flank cannons and a new weapon design by Admeral Gloade, the Gatling Gun, it is very powerful, it fires mini torpedos in a old 'chain gun' fashion and will bombard a enemy target" Tom comcluded
"Are you suggesting that we kill the Admeral Mr.Paris?" Janeway inquired
"Ha" Laughed Tom "I wish I am merely suggesting that we give them the ship and help them escape from federaion space, this ship could put fear into the Borg" Tom responded
"Rebellious, they will require more people on board that ship" Paris said "I reccmond that Weasly Crusher and his friend Anakah Hudson join them"
"Sounds good, lets see what they think of this plan, Tom bring you ship to the Enterprise" Janeway said
"Its already here Admeral, what do you think we did? Walk here?" Joked Tom
"Admeral Picard, Ms. Wildman, Mr. Icheb are here to see you" B4 said
"Allright, send them in, how convient now all we need to get is Anakah and Weasly" Picard said. When Naomi and Icheb entered the ready room holding hands they were surprised to see all the Admerals inside.
"Whats going on?"asked Naomi shyly
"Now, I havent heard that shy tone in years, Hi Naomi, Hi Icheb..."Chakotay said
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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"...You 2 wanna be together, you must leave federation space but they wont let you so we must leave by force, do you like the idea?" Chakotay finishes
"I will do whatever it takes to be with Naomi Admeral" Icheb responded
"Good, Anakah and Weasly should be here soon"Picard said
"Admeral, our guest have arrived" LaForge said
"Good, send them in" Picard ordered. Anakah and Weasly walked in
"Are we in trouble?" asked Anakah
"No, here is our plan you 4 will take out Commodore Paris experimental vessel, get out of federation space and come back when we tell you to, when it is safe" Picard said "Will you do it?"
"Will it let me marry Anakah?" Weasly asked. Anakah pushed Weasly and he poked her back
"Yes, will you go?" inquired Picard
"Yes I will" Weasly said
"Where Weasly goes, I go" Anakah responded
"Good, Admeral Chakotay to your ship" Picard said
"Wait its my ship, Chakotay wanna be first officer?" Janeway asked
"Yes Maim, lets go" Chakotay said. They walked to the TurboLift
"Sir, I will go to my ship and help out" Commodore Paris said he also walked to the TurboLift
"I will have my Galixy assist you" Admeral Paris said as he walked to the TurboLift
"Go to Paris Ship, Its In shuttle bay 1, All crew Red Alert!" Picard ordered
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sun Jan 04, 2004 6:14 pm |
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Admeral Paris Galaxy the USS Protege, Commodore Paris Soverion the USS Endavor, Vice Admeral Janeway Interpid the USS Voyager, Admeral Picard Soverion the USS Enterprise-E followed the USS Galaxia twards the premitor of federaion space...
"Well, well, well you are outnumered, I suggest that all of you turn back and we may skip the court marsal"
"Admeral Montgromy Shut up!" said Admeral Gloade who opened fire upon Montgromys Soverion and took on the whole fleet.
The largest ship opened fire with all 40 of its torpedo launcers, 100 phaser banks, 12 flack cannons and 2 gatling guns and obliterated Montgromys Soverion by the time Voyager, Enterprise, Protege, Endavor and Galaxia had joined them.
"Thanks for the help Mr.Gloade, you realize that starfleet wants you dead now" Janeway said
"Let them try, there is only one Galeta class, and only I have the specks" Admeral Gloade responded "Lets get to work". They quicky disabled the ships and obliterated the turrents and the Galaxia was free. Little did they know that the Federation Civil War had just begun...
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sabertooth1217 UPN Boycotter
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Sun Jan 04, 2004 8:19 pm |
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10/10
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Tech Rear Admiral
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 6:13 am |
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I'll admit, it's a pretty good story overall, but what the hell? A Federation Civil War just because of two lovers... ? Isn't that a bit extreme?
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Josi Rockholt Fleet Admiral
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 12:11 pm |
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It's good,very good.
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sabertooth1217 UPN Boycotter
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 12:17 pm |
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Lieutenant_Tech wrote: | I'll admit, it's a pretty good story overall, but what the hell? A Federation Civil War just because of two lovers... ? Isn't that a bit extreme? |
but have you read any stories off of this site that was like that? i thinnk that was a good idea.
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 3:27 pm |
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Im trying to combine romance and action here my previous attempt (Elite Force Story) became all romance....anywayz back to the story...
"Allright, I think we are safe, lets try to find a nebual to hide in for now..." Icheb said
"I hope they are allright"Naomi said stareing in Earth's direction
"I take it you have never heard of Admeral Mark Gloade" Weasly said "He started out as a fighter pilot, his family has been pilots for centuries, its in his blood"
"Ok, enough of him" Icheb said, turning green with envy" I have loacted a nebula about 50 paracets from here"
"Well, we better get going" Anakah said as she set a corse for the nebula. They put the ship on auto pilot so that they could have some down-time in the holodeck.
"Tom did a good job of designing this, crew is only 4 people, each have their own quarters, there is a big holodeck, engneering, the bridge is efficent, this ship was desgined to be efficent" Anakah said
"Quit thinking so much like a borg" Weasly said putting his arm around Anakah "your human now"
"Sorry" Anakah began as she lay her head on his shoulder "bad habit"
"What putting your head on his shoulder or talking like a borg?" inquired Icheb, knowing all to well her response
"HEY!" Anakah said playfully pushing Icheb into Naomi who giggled
"RED ALERT, WARBIRD HAS ENGAGED, SHIELDS ARE UP, SHIELDS ARE AT 100%" the computer said
"Great, at the worst possiple time, everyone battle stations" Icheb said
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 3:52 pm |
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Interesting plotline, Some of it seems a bit unrealistic though. Like Tech said, a whole war over two lovers? A ship that only one person has the specs for? What about the people who built and designed it? Surely Starfleet wouldn't possibly entrust that to one person. Or be able to, for that matter. Also, Janeway, etc seem a little out of character... And do you have a spellchecker you could use?
Good story, anyway,
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 3:57 pm |
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First of all the war started when Enterprise, Protege, Voyager, Galeta opened fire upon the federation fleet and second of all, they have all changed this is after NAOMI GRADUATES FROM THE ACADMEY!!!
so it is about 20 years in the future
Tom designs ships for starfleet the galeta was a secret project done by SI, they did not inform the federation about the project so it was ditched and all the specks destroyed except the admeral onboard kept the specks for his ship. that however is another story...
i will only post once a day, so i am here to answer your questions
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Thomas Pool Princess
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 4:19 pm |
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Mark Mag Gloade wrote: | First of all the war started when Enterprise, Protege, Voyager, Galeta opened fire upon the federation fleet and second of all, they have all changed this is after NAOMI GRADUATES FROM THE ACADMEY!!! |
Quote: | "Admeral Montgromy Shut up!" said Admeral Gloade who opened fire upon Montgromys Soverion and took on the whole fleet. |
"Shut up"? Sorry, it just doesn't sound very Admiral-like to me. You didn't really create a just cause for the ships to fire. And you've changed the characters a lot more than they would have changed IMO. But like I said, it's still a neat story.
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Mon Jan 05, 2004 8:03 pm |
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the admeral there is about 20 years old...he is a small role but there is a back up stor about that, i just havent posted it yet. This is about 20-30 years after voyager returns to the AQ
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"Weasly, They have opened fire...our shields are at about 75 percent as of now" Anakah said as she stepped up to the engneering station.
"Great...Naomi, Icheb keep an eye on our warp core!" Ordered Weasly "I quote Mr. Riker... 'Were through running from these bastards!'"
"Weasly, we better do something soon....they have taken our shields down to 68%" Anakah responded
"Conputer...overider and active manual controls" Weasly said
"Authorisation code required"The Computer responded
"Authorisation CrusherWRogue01" Weasly replyed
"Manual controls activated" The computer said
"Allright, lets do the Kirk manivor..."Weasly said with determination
"Weasly, our weapons are at full power, ready to blow them out of the sky" Anakah said
"Allright, hon. Go for it!" Weasly exclaimed. Seven fired the weapons at the Warbird, the shields looked like they failed and the Romulans retreaded behind their cloak."Cowardly Romulans" Weasly sneered "Damage report"
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"Shields are at 48%, Hull intregity is at 98%, Weapons are overheated, Warpcore is 100% operational" The computer responded
"Resume previous coarse" Weasly ordered thecomputer
"Coarse set" The computer replyed
"Ok, Lets have some R&R time, the shields are recharging" Icheb said
"Sounds good, back to the lounge!" exclaimed Naomi. They walked into the lounge and sat down on the chairs.
"Great, first the feds and now the romulans want us dead" Anakah said
"It's no problem, when it has all cooled down back home, Admeral Janeway will signal us" Icheb said
"True...But I'm worried about those ships that opened fire upon the defence fleet, they are all most likely facing a court marsal or 2 by now" Weasly replyed
"Don't worry, the fleet that is on our side could easily take down anything that stands in their way" Naomi responded
"Wow, I never knew you had a rebellious side to you Ms. Wildman" Weasly said
"Oh, she does!" Anakah exclaimed " I pratically raised the girl, I believe she followed my example"
"The pupal is outgrowing the mentor...sounds like you and Janeway there Anakah" Icheb replyed
"What are you kids talking about?" Weasly inquired
"You had to be there on Voyager..." Began Icheb before telling a whole lot of dirt about Anakah and Naomi....
Meanwhile in Sector 001, Earth...
"Admeral Janeway, Picard, Gloade, Riker and Paris you all face court marshals for you treason...what do you have to say about that?" Inquired Admeral Skoiski
"I say you were being fools, not letting Naomi and Icheb be together, that is a violation of their rites!" Janeway said in response
"So, Naomi is a graduate, Icheb is an Ex-Borg-"Began Skoiski
"His implants have been removed, why is it then you allow Anakah Hudsen and Weasly Crusher to date?" Janeway snapped back
"We didnt, when did this happen?" asked Skisoki
"Ok, how about this, our fleet is the most advanced ships in the entire federation armada...You will have to kill me before I give up Voyager" Janeway responded
"She's right before I surrender the Enterprise, I would have to be killed" Picard said
"Fine" Began Skisoki "If you wanna play that way, so be it, prepare to fight!"
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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The small band of ships prepared themselves, knowing all to well that defending people who were their family, and the decision they have made would mean a loss of all privliges and maybe their lives...
Anakah, Naomi, Icheb and Weasly were laughing and giggleing at some of the stories told about what had happened on Voyager when suddenly Anakah stopped. Something is Wrong... She thought but could not imagne what it could be about but there still was that feeling inside her that someone she loved very much was about to die. Anakah looked at Naomi, the girl she had raised, looked at Icheb the man who Anakah was like a mother to then she looked at Weasly. Anakah thought about Chakotay, Neelix, Tom and Kathyrn Janeway and all her family who was abord Voyager. Then it struck like a bolt of lightning.
"Janeway....no....something is going to happen to them!" Anakah screamed
"What...Anakah....are you ok?" Asked a worried Weasly
"Something is going to happen, they are going to die because of our decisions!"Anakah yelled
"They knew full well what would happen if they did what they did Anakah, we cannot go back" Naomi said sadly
"Yes, we can and we will, we must save them!" Anakah said
"One more ship won't make a difference, Anakah" Icheb responded
"Mabye not, but I want to be right beside Janeway if she is to die" Anakah replyed
"Ok, hon if you wanna go back, we will" Weasly said "Computer set coarse for U.S.S. Voyager's cordnates, warp 9.95"
"Coase and speed set" The computer responded as the small ship turned around and dissappeared in a flash of light.
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Sun Feb 01, 2004 6:14 pm |
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The story line that you have is great. Really it is, but some of it is a little confusing...I work with confusing stuff everyday so I am able to work it out lol...but yes it is good. I like. Would like to see more about this Janeway Chakotay thing you have going on...lol I like that idea
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sun Feb 01, 2004 9:20 pm |
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well, there is a whole backround story to this...I will have it posted on stv.com soon, I only do one post a day so, other then that I am here to answer your questions
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tom_88_2 Commodore
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Sun Feb 01, 2004 10:46 pm |
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it is very interesting
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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"When will we arrive at the cordnates?" inquired Naomi
"We shall be there in about...7 hours" Icheb responded
"NO, WE MUST BE THERE SOONER...OR THEY WILL DIE"
"Fine, computer warp 10" Ordered Weasly
Meanwhile...at the boundries between Federation space and the Neutral Zone...
"Admeral, there is a large fleet approaching" Chakotay said
"Allright, everyone battle stations" Janeway ordered
The fleet approached Voyager, Enterprise, Protege and Galeta and deployed their weapon that disabled the shields on the small band of ships. As Janeway's ship was being destroyed she turned and looked at Chakotay.
"I love you Kathryn" Were Chakotay's last words before Voyager was destroyed...
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tom_88_2 Commodore
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Mon Feb 02, 2004 10:30 pm |
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*looks shocked*
*points his finger at mark*
you destoyed voyager, how could u
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