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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 12:42 am The Tale of James |
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This is the Tale of james. A Cargo Pilot for the Earth mineing guilds. HE doesn't like his job. Pirates and gangs are all over the system. Humanity thought we could explore all of space. BUT,There is some sort of 'wall' isolateing the entire solor system off from the galaxy. James is a simple man just trying to survive. Untill they came..
"This is mineing ship Honeydew,requestin permission to dock and unload cargo, Over. This is Docking station. permission granted. So james, how life?Roger that docking station. Ahh you know how it is jim! No women on mars! Well, I'm done docking,Got that Power Clip for me yet?
Get outa your ship for once James!! Damn you gatta wake and smell the ore!" James Opens the cockpit and hops out* Grabing his belt and pulling out his Blaster. "Hey you Tech! get up to control and get Jim down here!" The Techs Blow him off and James gets mad,forgetting he needs a power clip,HE drops his belt and Walks over to the Techs. "I though i asked you nicely to do me a Favor!" the techs look at him and then turn back to their work not noticeing the Blaster. James then Gets REally mad and so he picks up one of the techs and Throws him agains the hull of a Rebulic Freaghter they were working on ,putting the blaster tip to the techs head. "JAMES DROP HIM YOU DUMBASS!" James looks over at jim who's holding the power clip. "Sorry Jim,You know how i am after a long trip!." "That may be true,But you need to remember when your outa ammo! Any ways you..." Suddanly ther is a loud noise and the Dock's doors are blown away. James thinking of himself first,Grabs the Power clip and loads it into is gun. Then Hundreds of Aleins Start Swarming the Place, the force feild Crackling evrytime another group of aleins came through. James ran to his ship,Grabbed his belt and started up his ship. Activateing the weapons system. The Heavy ship mounted blasters were illeage but James had far tomany encounters with pirates not to have them. JAmes Fired at the transport destroying it in a few shots. But due to the Explosion,the force feild collasped. Sucking everything,the ships tech and evan Jim out into the void. JAmes ENgins cut off due to the enormous strain on them,All but life support was gone. JAmes Flipped a switch and the NewsNet came on,the same thing happing on mars,the moon,Stations,notthing happing from earth at all. "No,no,no! THIS CAN"T BE HAPPENING!
-Hope ya'll like it so far! PLZ POST YOUR COMMENTS! PS it's Scifi if ya havn't guessed - pg-13 rated. may have to change that at a later date...-
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Cathexis The Angel of Avalon
Joined: 26 Dec 2001 Posts: 5901 Location: ~~ Where Dreams Have No End�
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 12:51 am |
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wow..perty good
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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 12:53 am |
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It could use some refinements,but thanks,Depending on the Mass reaction,I'll add more
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OmnipotentMoonBabe Dark Princess
Joined: 02 Aug 2001 Posts: 2477 Location: A galaxy far, far away...
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 2:14 am |
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It's sweet! But there needs to be a female character added IMO. It reminds me a little bit of the movie Alien Cargo off of the sci-fi channel...but ur version is much better so far.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 3:52 am Re: The Tale of James |
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- pg-13 rated. may have to change that at a later date...- |
To something lower, I presume, since PG-13 is the highest rating allowed here.
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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 11:42 am |
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lol,I know how the rateings work and such. but thx fer the reminder! anywho. I already thought of that lonna,lol
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 1:23 pm |
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Good! Then please continue with your story.
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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Wed Oct 29, 2003 8:47 pm |
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It had been about 2-3 weeks sense the 'Cee's' came and just abour obliterated everthing but the planets. But,earth had yet to be touched. SO now Begins the Rebellion..
"This is Squad 2, HoneyDew commanding. REquesting permission to dock, Over." Then the Beutyful Dock master,who had James' eye ever sense the freedom fighters were started. Replyed. "his is dock master,Clearance Granted,Dock bay 2 is clear."/i] "hy thank Rhiona,Mind if i ask you out tonight?" [i]Yes i mind,I have much better things to do then waste my time with you." James hops out of hi fighter GRabbing his Hand commlink,and linking it to his freighter now fighter. "Well,In that case i'll take it as a yes!" YOU IDIOT! YOU KNOWDARN WELL I.. James promptly cuts her off. " I don't have time to listin to you play hard to get" Pockets the Commlink and walks to the barracks and greets the variuos pilots throuout the base. Once he reache d his part of the barracks he enterd his barrack. He set everthing on the floor at his bed,Took a quick shower, and then started his log.Welp,I tried for Rhiona again,but as the last 3 weeks have shown,Shes not interested." James then Rools over and goes to sleep.
There happy now? Don't be suprised if i toss ina a Odd twist,I'm kinda just winging it here
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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Wed Nov 05, 2003 11:31 pm |
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WHAAA!! no one like my story Plz REad! Tell me if it suck or not@ Please?
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Tech Rear Admiral
Joined: 12 Apr 2003 Posts: 3476 Location: U.S.S. Galaxia
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Wed Nov 05, 2003 11:48 pm |
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It has a good plot. Good story overall. But, ah, work on your punctuations and spellings.
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Krall Klingon General
Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 3863 Location: Lie? I do not lie! Except just then.
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Thu Nov 06, 2003 12:17 am |
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Well Duh,I'l Add more soon!
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