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sevenofnive Freshman Cadet
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Mon Aug 18, 2003 8:06 am Seven Days/Nine Nights |
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Hey, guys. I'm new here. I don't know if this is in the right place. I have a story for you guys to read. It's far away from finished, but let me know what you think. BTW, my name is suipposed to be sevenofninefan1. Enjoy.
My Star-Trek Voyager Story:
Seven Days, Nine Nights
Characters:
Seven Of Nine
Capt. Katherine Janeway
B�Lenna Torres
Neelix
The Doctor
Jyotek
Neelix
Tom Paris
�I� (Author�s name anonymous)
Prologue:
Three billion light years away from home, our crew is having the time of their lives as they are celebrating their victory over the Kardacian. An uphill battle as Kardacian claimed they were provoked, which was really �spilled milk� or was it �spoiled milk� as Captain Janeway put it.
The mess hall, Voyager�s �cafeteria� was very jovial. Everyone was there from Captain Katherine Janeway and commanding officer, Chakotay to Neelix and his strange, yet, amicable crowd. Oh, and I shall not forget B�lenna Torres of Klignon roots and her husband Harry Kim; The proud parents of - well B�Lenna and Tom don�t know yet, and neither will we. Everyone from Janeway on down has joined in the festivities except one.
Chapter One: The Celebration
Voyager had fought strenuously against the seething Kardacian - an intense battle of words and weapons. Firing upon each other ships, the Kardacian decided to back down; for now.
All of the crew, had a very special surprise for Captain Janeway, but first they begged her to give a speech.
�Come on,� Janeway replied. �You can�t be serious.�
�Sure we are,�Chakotay replied. �If it wasn�t for you, we wouldn�t be where we are now.�
�All right, all right,� Janeway sighed. The crew listened as the captain obliged.
�So many years, yet so few chances . . . I�ve been with you guys for almost twenty years now and as a captain, I have come to the realization that it take more than a rank, or even more so, the obvious tasks of running a ship to be able to be given the title of Captain.�
�I knew from the start that this was going to be a huge responsibility on my shoulders; a responsibility to the crew, and to Voyager herself, but I�ve never neglected nor will I ever neglect the responsibility to myself.�
�Commander Chakotay,� she continued, �you say that you wouldn�t be here nor would you have made it this far without me. The truth is, I�d have never made it this far without you guys. This may come to you as a shock, but I consider myself a follower instead of a leader. I mean, who�s to say that I wasn�t leading in the first place.�
�All I�m trying to say is . . . �thank you,� she concluded, �for helping me become the person you see today. I appreciate every ounce of effort you�ve put forth these last twenty years . . .� Janeway said tearing up, �but I think it�s time . . . �
�Excuse me, Captain,� Chakotay said, �tell me � tell US � you�re not considering . . . �
�What? Oh, my, you guys think I�m leaving!� she laughed.
�You�re not?� Harry Kim asked.
�No,� she replied. �I was hoping to get my gift from you guys - your attention anyway.�
�Oh well, then,� Chakotay said relieved, but he was interrupted by an unfamiliar voice which had come through Janeway�s pin. �Captain, we meet again,� it said sadistically. All crew members headed to there stations as Captain Janeway commands this person to be shown on screen; however, all the crew sees is a silhouette
�Who are you and what do you want?� she asked.
�Ah, Captain Katherine Janeway, is that you?� the voice mocked.
�What the hell do you want?� she asked.
�Can�t a person come visit their friends once in a while?� The intruder eyes Katherine�s right hand. �A parting gift?� it snickered.
�No!� she stammered. �Look, I don�t know who you are, but I demand you get out of here now!�
�Okay, okay, fine,� it replied, �but you haven�t seen the last of us!� The screen goes back to it�s spacial self.
�Who was that and what does this person want?�Jyotek asked.
�More importantly,� Janeway inquired, who are �they?� She thought for a moment. They proceeded to walk back to the mess hall. �No, couldn�t be,� she said.
�Who? What?� Chakotay asked.
�Nevermind,� Janeway said. �Hey, thanks for the gift.�
�You like it?� Chakotay asked.
�Yeah,� she replied. �Wait a minute, there�s something else isn�t there?�
�Why,� he joked. �Whatever do you mean?�
�Oh, come on,� Janeway scowled jokingly. �A ring . . . pop?! Ooh!�
�Gotcha!� he laughed � so did the entire crew! �Delicious, isn�t it?�
�Yes,� Katherine replied, �and my favorite flavor, too.�
Now, there�s was more � food wise, I mean. Along the candy there was an assortment of �refreshments� from B�Lenna�s Klignonic cookies � to Neelix�s creep-show cuisine - that�s what he calls it � to The Doctor�s apple; somebody doesn�t want a check up, I presume!
Among all the �sour-kraut,� there were some �sweethearts� like: B�Lenna�s brownies � none for Harry, they were excellent to me; they can�t touch her cookies though; a fellow Kardacian�s cake (some were friends) to bubbling beverages like sparkling water; champagne and 7up � I wonder where that came from?
We ate and ate, till we could not eat anymore; however, as I mingled, I kept noticing someone appearing and disappearing out of the corner of my eye, but as always I decided to pay it no attention. Apparently, one of the crew members sensed my being distracted.
�Hey, I,� Tom asked, �are you all right?�
�Yeah,� I said, �Just thinking.�
�About what?� Tom asked. I quickly decided to change the subject. �B�lenna.�
�My wife?� Tom asked.
�Whoa, now Jeff Gordon,� I said. �It�s not like that. I was just wondering � how come you haven�t named the baby yet?�
�Oh, don�t tell me,� Tom said disgusted. �You have a list of names, too?�
�Well, just one that sticks out,� I said. �You might like it.�
�Shoot,� Tom said.
�It is a girl, right?� I asked.
�Yes,� he replied.
�Are you sure?� I joked. �Because you never know!�
Tom was about to throw me across the table. �I was just kidding! Damn, get a hold of yourself! It was B�Lenna�s cookies, wasn�t it?�
�Tom!� B�Lenna yelled. Harry released his grip.
�Okay, okay,� I said, �back to question at hand or my thought exactly. Since it�s a girl, how about, Helena? Think about it.�
�Harry,� he thought, �B�Lenna . . . Helena!� He looked at me, and I wasn�t sure what to think. �Harry . . . B�Lenna . . . HELENA! That�s it! The baby�s name. Oh, you�re a genius! Thank you! Thank you!�
�Oh, for the love of God,� I said, �you�re welcome! Now get off me!�
�Yes, Tom,� B�Lenna interceded, �please do.�
He did and I ridiculously found myself gasping abnormally for air. Yet, through all this, I kept wondering who did I keep making eye contact with? I had a feeling who it was. Nevertheless, the party continued without any further interruptions.
Chapter Two: Excluded
Here we find several crew, particularly, Captain Janeway and Chakotay walking down the ship�s corridor, chit-chatting as usual.
�Great speech,� Chakotay complimented.
�Really?� Janeway asked.
�I mean. wow,� he elaborated, �and you didn�t read anything. Hey, you know . . .�
�Okay, what do you want?� she interrupted. �Nothing. Hey, have you seen Seven?�
�No,� he said. �I haven�t seen her all day. Something wrong?�
�No,� Janeway replied. �I just thought that she would be here. I mean, who would want to celebrate a birthday without his or her best friend?�
�You know,� Chakotay said, �maybe she feels sick or something. Besides, she needs her rest anyway. You�ve been hounding with assignments lately. She is human, you know.�
�Yeah, you�re right,� Janeway said. �I forgot.�
�Well, this is my stop,� Chakotay said arriving at his quaters. �Are we still on for dinner?� he asked.
�Absolutely,� she said smiling.
As I said, I'm not finied yet.
Last edited by sevenofnive on Wed Aug 27, 2003 1:09 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Thomas Pool Princess
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[Moved from Star Trek: Voyager to Fan Fiction]
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Mon Aug 18, 2003 11:12 am |
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Good start, but perhaps slightly out of character. But since it's A/U, that's acceptable.
Please continue,
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sevenofnive Freshman Cadet
Joined: 16 Aug 2003 Posts: 7
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Mon Aug 18, 2003 12:23 pm |
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What do you mean?
"I" is like "Q"
Besides, I'm in the story; I don't want to reveal my name.
What is mean by
[/quote]Slightly out of character, sort of like A/U?[/quote]
Thanks.
This is me: (Read sig)
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Seven: My nodes are malfunctioning at the moment . . .
Captain Janeway: It's called stress, dear!
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Tue Aug 19, 2003 5:28 am |
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sevenofnive wrote: |
Besides, I'm in the story; I don't want to reveal my name. |
Good, don't do that.
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What is mean by
Slightly out of character, sort of like A/U? |
With slightly out of character I mean that B'Elanna wouldn't normally bake cookies, and Harry wouldn't throw people.
A/U means that it is an Alternate Universe. It is clearly not the normal Voyager since Kim is married to B'Elanna. And in an alternate universe, anything can happen.
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sevenofnive Freshman Cadet
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Wed Aug 27, 2003 1:04 pm |
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Guys, I'm sorry, I was confused I meant Tom Paris.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Wed Aug 27, 2003 2:13 pm |
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sevenofnive wrote: | Guys, I'm sorry, I was confused I meant Tom Paris. |
Instead of Harry Kim...?
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sevenofnive Freshman Cadet
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Fri Aug 29, 2003 8:35 pm |
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Yes.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Sat Aug 30, 2003 3:27 pm |
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Okay... How's the story coming?
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sevenofnive Freshman Cadet
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Mon Sep 01, 2003 7:21 pm |
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Not well. I know what I want to do, but I'm not sure where to put it and how to spread the story. Especially with a certain character.
Some ideas.
Again, "my nodes are malfunctioning"
"It's called stress dear!"
-------signature-------
Seven: My nodes are malfunctioning at the moment . . .
Captain Janeway: It's called stress, dear!
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Melodramatic Rear Admiral
Joined: 04 Feb 2003 Posts: 4577
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Mon Sep 01, 2003 8:48 pm |
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Good, story.
Very impressive.
Keep it up
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Tue Sep 02, 2003 3:10 pm |
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sevenofnive wrote: | Not well. I know what I want to do, but I'm not sure where to put it and how to spread the story. Especially with a certain character.
Some ideas.
Again, "my nodes are malfunctioning"
"It's called stress dear!" |
Try to make different scenarios up in your head, then choose the best one to put on paper.
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