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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Thu May 29, 2003 5:56 am "To The Stars..." (Please feel free to ADD!) |
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((This is my first crack at a startrek story so don't laugh or throw wierd objects such as pickels at me! PLEASE ADD ONTO IT! I think this'll be a great story to add onto! Tonight i'll add one more part onto it and you can start adding! Or you can add.........i don't know just add! lol))
"I hereby premote you Commander Corey Mansell, and you Commander Lianne Manzer to Captain!" Abig smile came from the two newly made captains. After shaking hands with the admiral, they both laughed with joy as they gave each other hugs.
"But that's not all!" Admiral Ballice said. "I've pulled some strings, and you've both been accepted to command the Oklahoma, and the Arizona!" Both were in shock, not only did they get premoted but their first command was the two newest vessels in starfleet! Corey jumped for joy as he did his victory dance. Leah looked at him funny. "Do you know that you look like an idiot?" They both laughed again as Leah joined in the dancing.
Leah and Corey have been great friends since the academy. However, when they first met, they completely disliked eachother. They competed at everything. To see who could get to ensign first, then lieutenant. Both of them were way ahead of their class. And because of them both "going the extra mile" just to pass the othe rank wise, they were both premoted together almost everytime. And because of that they learned they were very much alike. After being premoted to Lieutenant they both looked at eachother with the most serious of faces, and laughed. After that they were friends for life.
Leah was appointed the Oklahoma, and Corey, the Arizona. These ships were newly fitted with Slipstream technology. And given the great performance of the Enterprise, starfleet decided that these should be Sovereign class starships. On their maiden voyage, they were to head to Deep Space Ten at slipstream. There, there would be a big party for the crews of both ships.
Corey and Leah gave eachother another hug as they were ready to depart.
"I'll see you on the flip side." Corey said while stepping onto the transporter pad. "Let's do this." Corey dissapeared from sight. Leah slowly stepped onto the transporter pad. She never did like to be compressed into a data stream. She prefers the shuttle. But this was a special ocasion so she decided it would be alright. Leah nodded to the transporter officer, and as she began to dissapear she looked up and spoke quietly, "To the stars..."
Last edited by Praetor on Fri Jun 27, 2003 10:54 am; edited 2 times in total
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Lxe keep dreaming
Joined: 11 Aug 2002 Posts: 3622 Location: stv
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Thu May 29, 2003 6:07 am |
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ooh great story keep going!! I would add on to it but I'm not much of a fanfic writer it always comes out to be a first person type of thing like a diary or something.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Thu May 29, 2003 3:34 pm |
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Good start... Maybe people who are planning to add on needs a little background information? just a thought.
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Thu May 29, 2003 7:44 pm |
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lol duh, i'm an idiot! lol i agree totally, i left most of the story at school! but i shall provide some information momentarily.
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Kyle Reese Cadet Gunnery Sergeant
Joined: 21 Apr 2003 Posts: 5672 Location: The United States of America
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Thu May 29, 2003 7:59 pm |
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good story keep it up
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
Joined: 21 Mar 2002 Posts: 5221 Location: State of Insanity
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:07 pm |
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Throws a Random object at Corey, such as a pickel.... then whispers
"TO THE STARS" aww it was great! good work, and for your first one its AMAZING!>>>>POAST
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:10 pm |
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Captain Leah Manzer wrote: | Throws a Random object at Corey, such as a pickel.... then whispers
"TO THE STARS" aww it was great! good work, and for your first one its AMAZING!>>>>POAST |
lol thanks for throwing the pickel, i knew you were the only one who might! lol
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
Joined: 21 Mar 2002 Posts: 5221 Location: State of Insanity
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:11 pm |
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of COURSE!! GOOD WORK MAN!
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Kyle Reese Cadet Gunnery Sergeant
Joined: 21 Apr 2003 Posts: 5672 Location: The United States of America
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:12 pm |
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pickle? where? gimme it now!
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
Joined: 21 Mar 2002 Posts: 5221 Location: State of Insanity
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:21 pm |
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*hands him a pickle..* HAPPY?! lol j/k
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:25 pm |
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lol AH! I need backround info! leah! Any ideas?!
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Thu May 29, 2003 8:26 pm |
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Ok, well here is some info on the storyline.
On the maiden voyage of the ships, in slipstream, the Oklahoma was sabatoged and it smashes into the arizona, both ships explode, dropping out of slipstream, large fragments from the ships smash into a planet causing devistation. Warp plasma is spread into the atmosphere killing billions.
Then it goes to the time ship Centuria in the future...lol that's all i got right now!
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PicardsTrueLove Commodore
Joined: 26 Dec 2002 Posts: 1840 Location: Nowhere, Earth
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Thu May 29, 2003 9:16 pm |
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Write a little bit more: establish a bit more background and more about where you want the story to go. Then I'll add on. I don't want to corrupt your plot just yet.
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Fri May 30, 2003 5:33 am |
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PicardsTrueLove wrote: | Write a little bit more: establish a bit more background and more about where you want the story to go. Then I'll add on. I don't want to corrupt your plot just yet. |
lol not yet, but i'm sure you will! lol
((I won't be able to post more of the story until aboot 8 or so tonight! So in the mean time, why don't you throw pickels and or pudding at each other!))
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Mon Jun 02, 2003 6:06 am |
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-Arizona-
Captain Mansell walked out of the transporter room. All crewmembers were hurrying about, getting ready for the first voyage. He was proud, proud to be the captain of this ship, and proud to work among such honourable officers. He entered the turbolift. "Bridge."
-Oklahoma-
"Captain on the bridge." Leah's first officer said, as all bridge officers stood in respect to the captain. Leah walked over to the command chair, looked around at all the faces, waiting for her instructions. She sat down, as a response everyone else went back to their work. Leah looked to helm. "Report."
"Bringing the warp engines online now. Drydock has given us clearence to disembark." There was a small shutter as the hum of the warp engines came online.
-Arizona-
"Ahead 1/2 impulse. Once we're clear prepare for slipstream."
"Aye sir." Came from the helmsmen as he powered up the slipstream engines.
-Oklahoma-
"Slipstream velocity in 5..4..3..2.." Both vessels, the Arizona and the Oklahoma went into slipstream, the blue tunnel of energy forming around the ships.
-Arizona-
The ventral underbelly of the Oklahoma could be seen on the viewscreen.
"Smoothsailing." Captain Mansell whispered.
Without anywarning, the Oklahoma dived down towards Arizona. The front of the Oklahoma smashed into the bridge of the Arizona, killing them all instantly. First the Arizona's warpcore exploded, setting off the Oklahoma's. Both reducing their ships to pieces. They dropped out of slipstream, but the chunks of ship continued on towards a planet. The large fragments smashed into the planet with great force, causing massive crators of destruction. Plasma from the warp nacelles setteled on the planets surface, killing millions, and the suffering of billions.
-Aboard the Federation time ship Centuria.-
"Captain, we missed the opeing, it's happening all over again..."
Captain Blake was in command of the Centuria. "Ok...let's grab them 0.5 seconds before the Arizona explodes. No one will notice their gone." Blake looked at her first officer. "Commander, your with me."
-Before Arizona explodes-
The Oklahoma veered downward towards the Arizona. On the bridge there was a flash of light came in front of Captain Mansell and there stood Captain Blake. She shot a dart at Captain Mansell, both dissappeared from the ship.
-Centuria-
Four people quickly exploded onto the ship. Captain's Mansell and Manzer looked around at the pile of junk before them. "Where the hell are we?!"
"You are aboard the federation timeship Centuria. I am Captain Blake. We will explain everything, please fallow me."
The captain lead them to a room with a long table and some chairs. Similar to the briefing room on the Sovereign's.
"Please, sit down captains."
They both looked at eachother. Leah spoke. "We prefer to stand."
"Verywell, let's begin shall we? In the 29th century, there was a great war. Rogue time travellers raced through time causing havoc among history's events. Almost all was destroyed. The Federation, the Romulan Empire, the Klingon Empire, the Borg, everything was enihalated. As far as we know, this is the last vessel in the galaxy. We are not yet sure why we were the only survivors. We have been siphting throught ime, correcting huge disasters which should have never happened, which we think were caused by these time travellers. And we believe they caused both of your vessels to crash into eachother. And, by correcting this, we disaster, our future will be restored."
Captain Manzer and Mansell were both in shock.
"We believe that when your warpcores exploded in the slipstream, it did what was known as the "ripple effect" and rippled through time destroying this future."
This was alot for the two captain's to take in. Leah tried to make sence of this. "So, your saying our ships, exploding, in slipstream, destroyed the future. So if that's true, how did you get us if our ships already exploded?"
Captain Blake began to look annoyed like she's had this conversation before. "There are an infinite number of universes, parallel to eachother. We have the technology to pinpoint one universe and enter or exit it at will."
((THIS IS ALL I HAD TIME TO PUT! AHH! lol i still don't know if it's enough information for people to start adding stuff.....but hey, if you do thanks! if you don't you don't, i'll keep adding some more!))
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Tyvek Rear Admiral
Joined: 11 Jul 2001 Posts: 2821 Location: Mississippi, USA
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Wed Jun 11, 2003 4:34 pm |
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pretty good I rather enjoyed it, maybe I'll add some also *Throws a pickle and hits paetor* hehe
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Tyvek Rear Admiral
Joined: 11 Jul 2001 Posts: 2821 Location: Mississippi, USA
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Wed Jun 11, 2003 5:01 pm |
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It was definitely a lot to take in, Leah thought as she decided to take her seat. �Now that you have been briefed on the situation, I would prefer the both of you to visit sickbay for an inoculation to protect you from Tachion field emissions,� Captain Blake said as he helped Leah out of her seat and guided them to sickbay.
�Computer Activate LCH,� Blake said to no one in particular, a female appeared in the room, she had long auburn hair and a fair complexion, �Please State The Nature of The Medical Visit,� the woman said to the new visitors, I have got to change that subroutine, Blake thought regarding the greeting from the LCH.
�Doctor Melora, I would like to treat Captain Manzer and Mansell for Tachion Emissions,� Captain Blake said to the LCH holding a medical Tricorder, �I�ll Be sure too inoculate them, but first ill need to treat them for Anti-Matter Radiation, they both have a mild dose,� The beautiful Hologram relayed to the Captain before she made her way to the two patients. �So were the two of you raised in the same house hold?� The LCH asked, �No, Why?� Corey quickly replied, �Well according to my Tricorder, I am treating paternal twins, �What!?� Corey and Leah screamed as the looked at each other shock reading on one another�s faces. The LCH noticed the commotion between the two �I take it you never knew,� she said, but she received no reply as Corey and Leah looked at each other.
�It�s got to be a mistake, no offense,� Leah said to Corey as they searched their records comparing notes, �Here it is,� Corey said as he looked at his adoption papers Maternal Parent: Dottie Floer Deceased, Paternal Parent: Jackson Floer ADM. Deceased. Leah looked through her records until she found her adoption report and read hers aloud realization coming to her �Dottie Floer and Jackson Floer Deceased,� she read on, � No Next of Kin Adoption recommended, Well Corey,� Leah thought � I guess we had more in common than we thought.�
((Why not add a Sub Plot makes things more interesting Plus a Plot Twist to liven things up ))
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Fri Jun 27, 2003 10:26 am |
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lol excellent, definitely didn't see the twin thing coming! that was great! Hmm i'll try and add more.
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Fri Jun 27, 2003 10:49 am |
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Captain Blake stood. "Well i'll show the two of you too your quarters, for tomorrow will be a busy day, for us all."
The two captains gave eachother a weary look and then stood, and fallowed captian blake. On the way to their quarters they saw crewmembers sealing up bulkheads and fixing circuit boards. Lights flickered in the hallways as they entered their rooms. Their quarters were in relatively good shape compared to the rest of the ship. It was kind of small, two beds, one bathroom, and what looked like a replicator.
"Good night." Captain Blake said softly, as she exited. Making sure the door was closed all the way, Corey rushed to Leah's side. "Somethings not right, for the only ship in the galaxy, they've sure got a lot of damage done to it." Leah thought for a moment. "Well maybe.....a different time zone...or something? There could be any amount of reasons the ship could be damaged. Why didn't you just ask Blake?"
"Ya, maybe your right..." Corey walked to the bathroom and activated the sonic shower. Leah sat on the edge of her bed and looked out the view port. The stars were slowly going by as the ship traveled through space, empty space, silent space. Softly she spoke to herself, a poem by Edgar Allan Poe.
"'Twas noontide of summer,
And mid-time of night;
And stars, in their orbits,
Shone pale, thro' the light
Of the brighter, cold moon,
'Mid planets her slaves,
Herself in the Heavens,
Her beam on the waves.
I gazed awhile
On her cold smile;
Too cold- too cold for me-
There pass'd, as a shroud,
A fleecy cloud,
And I turned away to thee,
Proud Evening Star,
In thy glory afar,
And dearer thy beam shall be;
For joy to my heart
Is the proud part
Thou bearest in Heaven at night,
And more I admire
Thy distant fire,
Than that colder, lowly light." At these last words, she fell asleep. Corey came from the shower, and was about to speak but saw Leah sleeping silently, so he didn't. He climbed into bed, and dreamt of the new day.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Jun 27, 2003 2:23 pm |
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The poem really adds depth!
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Praetor The Architek
Joined: 25 Jul 2001 Posts: 4810 Location: Somewhere I possibly couldn't go...
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Fri Jun 27, 2003 7:10 pm |
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Thanks! lol i try! quickly! someone add something else!
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