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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Thu Dec 26, 2002 1:37 pm Startrek Voyager: Baby Story |
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Here is an eopside of voyager i have written.tell me what you think.
<Chakotay is walking through the corridor as his last log entry plays>
Chakotay:First officers log stardate 696.9,it has been a producive week on voyager...b'lanna is still going crazy while tom is falling asleep at the conn.perhaps they need time off until their child is born.
<chakotay knocks on Tom and B'lanna 's quaters door>
Chakotay:Tom?B'lanna? wake up.your both late.
<tom answers from in the room>
Tom:Sorry commander we had another false alarm,im thinking of me and B'lanna sleeping in sickbay.
Chakotay:Tom i have decided to let you both have some time off.
Tom:Commander?i am okay.....but i am not sure about B'l-
B'lanna:Tom i am fine okay?i can go to wo-
<B'lanna begins to scream in pain>
Tom:Paris to sickbay medical emergency.
END OF PART ONE
Last edited by Mark Mag Gloade on Wed Jun 25, 2003 8:19 am; edited 1 time in total
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Thomas Pool Princess
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 5:16 am |
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[off topic-moved from Voyager to Fan Fic-chocho_11]
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 8:29 am |
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seems to be a good start...
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Archon34 Commodore
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 11:43 am |
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it's a good start but needs some magic
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Seven of Nine Sammie's Mammy
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 3:39 pm |
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OK, but I'll need more to judge
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IntrepidIsMe Pimp Handed
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Fri Dec 27, 2002 6:47 pm |
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yeah, its a pretty good beginning
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harry_kim Captain
Joined: 10 Dec 2002 Posts: 665 Location: Voyager
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Sat Dec 28, 2002 10:52 pm |
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I like it...next part needs to have the doctor running around screaming and getting mad about everything
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voyagerfreak29 Commander
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Tue Dec 31, 2002 7:13 pm |
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harry_kim wrote: | I like it...next part needs to have the doctor running around screaming and getting mad about everything | yeah that would make it really funny
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janewaykat Vice Admiral
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Tue Dec 31, 2002 7:21 pm |
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its good
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harry_kim Captain
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Tue Dec 31, 2002 10:40 pm |
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Well...will it be continued?
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belannaparis Crewman
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Sun Jan 12, 2003 7:56 am |
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when r u going to write the next chapter good start we want more
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PicardsTrueLove Commodore
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Sun Jan 12, 2003 10:10 am |
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more more more!!!
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
Joined: 09 May 2002 Posts: 1590 Location: At the Helm, where else?
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Sat Apr 05, 2003 11:03 am |
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sorry i was not on much
chakotay and tom begin to lift bl'anna and they run through the corridors of voyager....
computer activate the EMH tom says
please state the nature of- never mind mis torres please calm down
blanna grabs the doctors neck and says tell me this in not another false alarm
well can i atlest scan you? the doctor says
after 5 mineutes of profanity,screaming and the destroying of sick bay the doctor finally comes to a conclusion
congraultions its a.........
to be continued
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Sat Apr 05, 2003 1:25 pm |
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Hmmm...... Whata is it?
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Sat Apr 05, 2003 4:42 pm |
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Please what did they have.....
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Mon Apr 07, 2003 6:18 pm |
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...is a flase alarm
you bleep hologram and after saying that torres try to rip of the doctors neck
no miss torres please calm down
HELL NO
MISS TORRES CALM DOWN OR I WILL HAVE TO SEDATE YOU
the doctor give her a sleeping drug
never a dull moment is sickbay he mutters
hey doc can we sleep in her tom questions
whats it matter we have done this for the last week
tom you and blanna are orderd to take time off
yes sir tom mutters....perhaps the crew will get some sleep i think they can her us on deck 15 toms fuatla attempts at humor do not ease the situation.....
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Tue Apr 08, 2003 1:06 pm |
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Flase alarm..
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Thu Apr 10, 2003 3:36 pm |
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a good writer will keep the readers in suspence
chakotay janeway says, this baby problem is a real problem...
i agree captin on deck 2 i can hear b'lanna threating to kill the doctor at 200 hours and tom and the doc telling her to calm down....
perhaps we should transport the baby out of her
no chakotay says
wel what should we d- the captin says
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA DONT YOU BEEP TOUCH ME
B'lanna honey please calm down
My MATERIX SHE WILL CALM DOWN I WILL SEDATE MS.TORRES!!!!
GET YOUR HOLOGRAOHIC HANDS OFF ME
ahh 200 hours,right on scedual chakotay mutters....
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Sat Apr 12, 2003 2:13 pm |
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transport...
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The_Doctor Lieutenant Commander
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Sat Apr 12, 2003 3:38 pm Nice |
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It's pertty nice, keep working on it
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Tue Apr 15, 2003 10:22 am |
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WRITERS BLOCK AARRRRRGGGGGGGGGEEEEEEEEE
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Kyle Reese Cadet Gunnery Sergeant
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Wed Apr 30, 2003 5:58 pm |
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lol transporting it out... good plan
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sat May 03, 2003 6:14 pm |
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PARIS PARIS chakotay vellowed
...wa...o....sorry sir tom answerd drearly
paris you are orderd to rest
.....no sir i am fine......
tom plase go get some sleep b'lannas next false alarm is not due till 200 hrs
yes sir
(it is 1 week after, paris was returned to duty)
AAAAAAAAAAACCCCCCCCKKKKKKK
chakoty?
yes tom
tell me that was not b'lanna
im sorry it was
damnit.....
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hey, not bad...
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Mark Mag Gloade Forum Drifter
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Sun May 11, 2003 6:42 pm |
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honey are you alrgiht
that bleep of a klingon would no shut the bleep up so i sedated her
ok doc wats the problem
b'lanna
she is not a problem!
wanna settle this on the holodeck mr.paris?
your on!
lol
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