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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Mon Feb 10, 2003 3:58 pm |
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Good, too
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Tue Feb 11, 2003 12:07 am |
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Thanks...
Now... I think CappyD is writing next.. not sure
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Thomas Pool Princess
Joined: 08 Jul 2001 Posts: 19730 Location: Manchester
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Tue Feb 11, 2003 1:26 pm |
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Ohhh... nice.
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Frosty Lieutenant
Joined: 30 Jan 2003 Posts: 162 Location: ON, Canada
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Tue Feb 11, 2003 9:17 pm |
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Very interesting; I like the description and the names. Whenever I try to think of alien/medeival names I usually end up inserting far too many consonants and removing far too many vowels. (i.e.: my Instigator story, names inspired by crazy Norse mythology names, where vowels didn't exist).
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Wed Feb 12, 2003 3:58 am |
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LOL!!
I personally suck at making up names too, all the names were made up by CAppyD
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Mon Feb 17, 2003 11:11 am |
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OK, Im writing the next part since CappyD's been busy lately.
Jon continued to walk along the path leading to the city, for 2 days. Then he met one known as Will the Wayfarer.
"The WayFarer, is what I am called. I walk through the land of Silmaria selling my goods. But tell me about yourself Young man."
Jon told him little, but enough for the man to realise that Jon was alone and travelling to the city. "Where are you going Jon?", he asked.
"I am going to the nearest city, I am not sure which, or where. Do you have a map or something?"
"Ahh... I do have a map, but I will not let You use it for free."
"But I have no money", Replied Jon
Will the wayfarer said "Then tell me more about your quest and I'll show you the map"
Jon narrated the entire episode. Atlast Will said. "Hmmmm.. A noble quest indeed. Mind if I join you? I will share my knowledge and my belongings with you. And I am a trader and have seen many lands. But now business isnt doing well since the death of King Velenor of the Antaran Empire."
After some thought, Jon said "Fine, you can join me, although I am not sure of what to do or where to go! But together we can do something. Show me the map now please."
((The map:))
Jon's hometown was Aspreza. The capital city of Anatara was far away. For now they realised that they must go to the nearest city which was Briala.
They walked towards Briala.
Last edited by Robin on Tue Feb 18, 2003 4:10 am; edited 1 time in total
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Mon Feb 17, 2003 3:40 pm |
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Cool map!
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Tue Feb 18, 2003 4:23 am |
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Thanks
I got it from somewhere and edited some stuff, like the names...
Jon was peering into the map with interest, for the first time he wa seeing the map of Silmaria.
"Could you explain what all these places and markings are Will?", said Jon.
"Sure Jon, we are here, walking towards Briala. We started from Aspreza ofcourse, your hometown. We'll walk to Briala then go left to Imazi. The place marked with the red Circle is my home. My real home. I havent been there in many years. I've been down on my luck for some years now.. And to make things worse, the Emperor has been assasinated.
As you can see, the leftmost city on the map is Antara. The capital city... But we dont want to be go there. Oh no.. Not now. The situation is terrible. Till we get a new Emperor, we are all unsafe."
As they walked and talked along the reached Briala.
"There she is, the beautiful town of Briala", Said Will looking quite happy.
"Lets go to the bar, shall we, Jon?"
"lets go....", Jon said. And, they entered.
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Thomas Pool Princess
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Tue Feb 18, 2003 4:55 am |
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What's that freaky box thing on the right of the map?
Nice writing, nice map.... write more.
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Tue Feb 18, 2003 5:00 am |
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The box thing... errrmm... the map already had that..
I couldnt remove it or else some part of the map would get cut off..
I didnt make the map you know, I just got it from somewhere else
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Thomas Pool Princess
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Tue Feb 18, 2003 5:06 am |
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I know, you did say it before.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Tue Feb 18, 2003 3:27 pm |
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Nice chapterr
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Wed Feb 19, 2003 3:02 am |
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Now I think I'll wait for CappyD to write more..
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As they entered, the smell of ale crawled into Jon's nose.
Unshaven pirates, mysterious wanderers, priests and merchants occupied just about every seat in the place.
Jon looked around and sighted people of races he had never seen. One looked like an ordinary human, but with pointed ears. From the tales he had heard, he could say that the individual was an Elf. There were many kinds of Elves. He couldnt make out which kind of elf this particular individual was. He couldnt even remember all of the Elven races.
He also saw a small man with large hairy feet. An halfling...
He and Will went up to the bar at Will leaned towards the bardesk. Jon did the same. Then in came a strange figure. He had long pointed ears, a long nose, two fangs that stuck out of his big mouth pointing upwards. His hair was red and his skin was green.
No one reacted. Just Jon. Apparently it wasnt unusual to get guests like that outside of Aspreza.
Suddenly the beast turned his head to him and said,
"Wat'cha lookin' at, human youngster!? Turn your eyes and look at tha pretty human ladies instead, huh? Ha-Ha!"
Jon turned away and blushed. Looking down on the bar desk...
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Sat Feb 22, 2003 4:58 pm |
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Nice
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Sun Feb 23, 2003 3:48 am |
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Good
Write more CappyD
My writing aint that cool
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Thomas Pool Princess
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Sun Feb 23, 2003 10:40 am |
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I like.
You both have a good writing style.
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Robin Vice Admiral
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Sun Feb 23, 2003 1:36 pm |
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Tell that to my english teacher!
Lets see.. If cappyD comes he'll write the next part, or else I'll write it..
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