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Chakotays Angel
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 Fri Feb 07, 2003 11:42 pm Beginning of my J/C story |
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I wrote this for fun one night and never finished, any ideas or suggestion on what should happen next please feel free to post them... Here you go
The Commander's uniform and the Captain's uniform lay forgotten in the shadows in the corner of the tent which was illuminated only by a flickering lamps.Thier owners slowly uncurled from a naked embrace that had lasted long after the lovemaking. Chakotay started to sit up,and Kathryn reached out her sinewy arms to pull him back. He was happy to oblige her needs by again nestling with in her soft breasts and limbs. He could feel her arms tightening around his back as she buired her little girl's face in the crook of his shoulder. What drove this incredible woman? he wondered. She could best any man in a phaserfight and that would be enough for most men. She could love a man to death, he knew that much.
She was a warrior in the noblest,most chivalrous sence. In the span of single day, she could be an inspiring leader, an insatiable lover and a vulnerable child. 
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Voy_Girl
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| Sat Feb 08, 2003 2:00 pm |
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Hmm... they could do some talking... Just don't exceed Pg-13.
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Chakotays Angel
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| Sat Feb 08, 2003 2:54 pm |
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Ok thanks 
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Voy_Girl
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| Sat Feb 08, 2003 2:59 pm |
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Will be nice to read something more.
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Chakotays Angel
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| Sat Feb 08, 2003 3:03 pm |
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I was thinking of making the next part where Kathryn is having second thoughts on what happen between her and Chakotay in the tent. I plan on making the story a PG13 so that why I can post it here
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Thomas
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| Sun Feb 09, 2003 4:47 am |
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That's a good start... would like to see what happens next.
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Voy_Girl
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| Sun Feb 09, 2003 3:53 pm |
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| Chakotays Angel wrote: | | I was thinking of making the next part where Kathryn is having second thoughts on what happen between her and Chakotay in the tent. I plan on making the story a PG13 so that why I can post it here |
That sounds like a good idea... Interesting.
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Chakotays Angel
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| Fri Feb 14, 2003 8:09 pm |
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Here is what I got so far that I could save before my computer crashed
Kathryn woke to a soft kiss on her lips as the morning light broke threw the flaps. "Good Morning Love " Chakotay whispered in soft loving voice as she begain to rise up out of his arms. Kathryn did even look or reply back just started to look around the tent for her uniform.
What do you think?
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Voy_Girl
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| Sat Feb 15, 2003 4:13 pm |
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Good start
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Archon34
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| Sat Feb 15, 2003 11:40 pm |
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yep good 1
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Josi Rockholt
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| Sun Feb 16, 2003 4:07 pm |
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Please continue.It's good.
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Thomas
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| Mon Feb 17, 2003 6:25 am |
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Nice beginning.
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Chakotays Angel
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| Mon Feb 17, 2003 5:57 pm |
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next part so far,
Chakotay got up reaching for Kathryn's arm to turn her around to face him. " Kathryn,What is wrong with you this morning" he said in a angry voice that caused her to cry. " Oh Chakotay, last night was all a mistake" replied Kathryn through the tears. He looked at her with pain and hurt in his dark eyes knowing that the love they made last night was just her way of using him. Kathryn slowly pulled away out of his grip wanting to say something back that would easy the pain in her heart.
Hope you enjoy
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Josi Rockholt
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| Mon Feb 17, 2003 8:06 pm |
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Please continue.It's good.
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Thomas
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| Tue Feb 18, 2003 4:48 am |
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Wow, good writing. 
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Voy_Girl
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| Tue Feb 18, 2003 3:29 pm |
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Good!!!!
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PicardsTrueLove
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| Wed Feb 19, 2003 3:08 pm |
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 You are a fellow Queen of Angst I take it? very good so far...
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Chakotays Angel
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| Fri Feb 21, 2003 9:30 pm |
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Yes I am and pround of it. I will be posting more to the story tomarrow.
So I hope you like what will happen next to our favorite couple
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Thomas
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| Sat Feb 22, 2003 10:58 am |
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I'm sure we will.
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Chakotays Angel
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| Sat Feb 22, 2003 5:01 pm |
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Next Part
" For god sake Chakotay, could you please turn around so I can explain" cried Kathryn through the tears " Chakotay turned to face her so she could see the tears that were begin to form in his dark eyes. " Explain what , On how you used me and pushed me away after making love to me?" he replied with a sarcasm in his voice. " Only that I don't want to lose you in the way that I have lost everyone else that have come to love me!" Kathryn sighed in a strong voice. He was shocked by her answer and the way she held herself after say it. Kathryn was not finished with what she had to say to him. " Chakotay the reason that I said last night was a mistake is that I been giving some good or bad news by the Doctor!" she said with a whisper of sarcastic tone.
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Voy_Girl
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| Sat Feb 22, 2003 5:03 pm |
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Ohh.... Interesting events...
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Chakotays Angel
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| Sat Feb 22, 2003 5:12 pm |
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the last part that I forgot to add to the post before.
" Oh What did the Doctor tell you my sweet little captain?" Chakotay said in a mocking matter. "Damit Chakotay, the Doctor told me that I'm going to be a mother in nine months and that its your Child!"
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Thomas
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| Sun Feb 23, 2003 10:30 am |
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Great.
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Voy_Girl
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| Sun Feb 23, 2003 1:39 pm |
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Oops!
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Chakotays Angel
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| Sun Feb 23, 2003 5:33 pm |
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more for you to read
Chakotay was caught off guard by what Kathryn just said causing him to stumble and falling back on to the floor. Kathryn walked over to were Chakotay had fallen reaching out her hand to help him up. He took hold of her hand instead of pulling himself up off the floor, Chakotay pulled Kathryn down into his arms placing a strong kiss on her soft lips. " I take that as a sign that your no longer upset with me Chakotay." she whispered in a soft caring voice. "Why didn't you tell me about the baby after the Doctor told you the news?" Chakotay said with a tone. " I was afraid that you won't want to be with me after you found out about the baby!" Kathryn replied as the tears started to form again in her eyes.
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