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PostSat Nov 16, 2002 4:48 pm    

angeldust247 wrote:
thank you ann. thank you naomi.
i tried fan fic out i think i'll leave that to you two. and stick to poems.
i don't have the nack for writing stories.


I can't think you write bad fanfic!


*
oh... I really need to get the next chapter up Soon!!!!!!



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PostSun Nov 17, 2002 2:31 pm    

Extra Chapter 15.

***

Janeway cleared her throat louder than necessary, it cut through the otherwise endless feeling
of pressuring silence.
”Now, can we please go back to that agreement we were discussing.” It was not a question, if
anything it was a repressed request for participation.

”No, you may not. There will be no agreement, no discussing!” The sharp female voice
intruded on the group�s state of complete serenity, bringing reality and its hate back into their
existence.

”Shiral”, Tom muttered, tired and annoyed. ”How did you get here?”

”Ecbel told someone, and someone told me.” The vain tone in her voice let know that she still
saw Tom as nothing but a dumb bartender, a creature lower down the ladder of worthiness.
And on top of it all; an alien male.

Shiral snorted and turned to face the tired face of Schrih, the both women�s eyes narrowed
dangerously.

”We Sprai-koo women are proud!” Shiral began. ”WE don’t bend to anyone, especially not to
different, thievish males.”
It seemed like the former director had became the employee; the simple bar owner the one with
the power.

”You have no say”, Schrih retorted slowly, psychically growing a little again.

”As you are weakened by an unknown decease, I don�t see you as a competent leader. And as
I am the only one here--” Shiral looked down briefly, doubting for a second to proceed with
her lies. ”I challenge you to fight for your right to decide the faith of our future alliances with
the Taali.”

Shiral looked demandingly at Schrih, though her uncertain heart throbbed in her chest. Schrih
looked ruefully back.

”She is in no condition to fight! Her strength is impaired to both body and soul.” Bral put a
protective hand on Schrih�s firm, but descending shoulder.

”I will do what I must”, Schrih defended herself. She shook of the heavy hand holding her
back, and tried to stand tall and undefeatable before Shiral, though her vision was fuzzy, her
hands trembling and her forehead damp. ”If fight is the only option, fight is what I will do.”

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PostSun Nov 17, 2002 7:48 pm    

hey i like it. she does what needs to be done even though she doesn't feel too good. good chap. ann

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PostMon Nov 18, 2002 2:17 pm    

I saw no phasor fire.


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PostMon Nov 18, 2002 3:46 pm    

angeldust247 wrote:
hey i like it. she does what needs to be done even though she doesn't feel too good. good chap. ann


Hey thanks... That was the message I thought about getting up...



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PostMon Nov 18, 2002 3:50 pm    

chocho_11 wrote:
I saw no phasor fire.


Take a break, Chocho! Calm down an dwait until the next bloody (not swering!) chapter...



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PostTue Nov 19, 2002 12:15 pm    

*Takes heavy breaths*.

Maybe you could let me write the next chapter. I promise I wouldn't get carried away.



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PostTue Nov 19, 2002 3:25 pm    

You can give it a try if you want.... I promise I'll give yu a shot!


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PostThu Nov 21, 2002 12:29 pm    

Ooh really?


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PostThu Nov 21, 2002 3:08 pm    

Yeah, sure GIve it a shot and show me the result


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PostFri Nov 22, 2002 12:14 pm    

Okay, I'll get to work later.

"Give it a shot". Good pun!



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PostFri Nov 22, 2002 3:30 pm    

Good

And now that you say it... It was a good one...



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PostMon Nov 25, 2002 2:13 pm    

I have the first part, I'll post it tomorrow.


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PostMon Nov 25, 2002 3:04 pm    

Okay... I'm anxious to see the result.


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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 11:54 am    

Janeway reached down, slowly and silently to her waist. Her hand slid onto the grip of her phasor. Feeling the cold finish of the top, she gripped it tightly and closed her eyes, silently pulling it level with her chest.
The most important alien of the group turned around sharply and her gaze locked with Janeway�s. She was unarmed.
That didn�t stop her from flying at the Captain, forcing the marvellous woman to dodge swiftly to the left. Turning, Janeway saw that she was coming back again; she had no time to aim!
There was a slow whine and the woman�s eyes widened as she fell to the floor. �Are you okay Captain?� It was Harry Kim, his own phasor clutched tightly in his hand.
Janeway had no time to give an answer, as the other two aliens present drew weapons that seemed to appear from no where.
Janeway dived into a curve in the wall, while Tom and B�Elanna scarcely made it behind an old piece of furniture. Harry however was not so lucky; the alien man poised his weapon and fired, a triumphant look on his face. Harry dropped down to the floor in mid-jump with a sharp thud. His head rolled to one side and blood spilled out all over the polished floor.
B�Elanna gave a gasp but stayed behind her cupboard while Tom stared in shock at the alien. Janeway however didn�t seem to care that her Chief of Operations had been shot and tapped lightly on her phasor controls, setting the level a little higher.
She twisted out from behind the wall but had no time to fire as a bolt almost stuck her head. Ducking back down she thought of the sparks that flew from Voyager�s control panel when phasor fire hit them.
B�Elanna was a little more daring than her commanding officer and fired quickly at the alien woman. She successfully hit the woman�s side and she silently hit the floor, but not before the man had aimed his weapon at B�Elanna and got a clean shot on her head. She fell back behind the cupboard as her hair began to slowly change colour from brown to red. �Better than hair dye,� thought Tom as he sprang up and hit the remaining alien in the back while he was firing at the Captain once more.
He strode out into the middle of the hall and kicked the three aliens, making sure they were actually unconscious. Janeway came out of her hiding place casually, a little too casually. Tom looked up to see the receiving end of her phasor. There was its slow whine again and Tom hit the floor.
Unlike the others Tom didn�t fall unconscious. He looked up at Janeway and raised his hands to his face, tugging at its corners, his skin began to move.
Janeway just stood there as if she were replicating coffee. When he had finished a small human stood in his place. �Next time you try and infiltrate my ship, do it properly.� The man looked up gruffly at her.
�Oh I�m not finished yet.� He raised his phasor and his hands tightened on the trigger; Janeway�s own weapon was dangling in her hand.



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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 11:55 am    

Now be honest.


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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 12:29 pm    

horrible, plain horrible...J/K dam i didnt noe u cud write so well..

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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 12:41 pm    

Oh thanks! Was there enough phasor fire?


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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 4:09 pm    

It's real good.... But... you changed the course of the story completely and made the ending unuseful!
But you're a good writer



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PostTue Nov 26, 2002 4:15 pm    

Thanks. I didn't seriosly expect you to use it, but you have to let me do the follow up then you carry on. Was there enough phasor fire though? That worried me a little.


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PostWed Nov 27, 2002 8:40 am    

Okay, give us your sequel....

<About the phaser fire... enough is enough
It was over the line for the "this is the least phasor fire an action story can contain", so you don't have to worry....



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PostThu Nov 28, 2002 1:27 pm    

I think I'll have to write the sequel over the weekend, so if you want to post your next part, go ahead.


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PostThu Nov 28, 2002 2:10 pm    

I think I'll wait for you.


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PostFri Nov 29, 2002 11:24 am    

Thanks, I'll get cracking asap.


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PostFri Nov 29, 2002 4:11 pm    

Good... Can't wait to see how you'll fix it...


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