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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Tue Nov 05, 2002 11:44 pm Mind- J/C Finally added more....#6!! |
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THis is adventures if Voyager didnt get back to Earth with the help of Admiral Janeway. Set 3 years for "Endgame".
Disclaimer: Blah, Blah, Blah... Paramount, owns this, and Paramount owns that... Really I think that Paramount owns the whole world and they are really, just simple puppets in an evil alien's game! But this could just as easily turn into a non-paramount owned story, and they could be on a Boat! Mahahah how do you like THAT evil Alien race! But I really could just as easily say "I do not own or plan to make profit off of any stories I have created. Paramount owns all right to "Star Trek: Voyager"and its characters." But I think my way is much more fun... Enjoy!
Authors note: I'd Just like to say that is my very first Fan Fiction... EVER! Now don't click the "Back" button so soon, I spent a lot of time on this piece and I think it is ok.... Thanks for reading, if you didn't, you heartless person.
I'd also like to say thanks to my best friend Joanna. I convinced her to read this (even though she hates startrek) and she accually liked it! She has also imputed some great ideas for it and helps me with the plot THANKS
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A small tear trickled down her face. She looked up at him. Gently he wiped the tear off her check and tightened his arms around her.
"It's going to be alright," he assured her, "I'm not going to let anything happen to you."
She looked up at him again. Her face was full of confusion and fear. Many questions circled around her head unsure how to act. She couldn't remember a thing, where she was, who he was, but least of all who she was.
"Are you hungry?" he asked.
She nodded her head politely. That she was definite about. From what she could remember, she hadn't eaten in hours.
A plate of food was placed in front of her.
"What is it?" she mumbled.
"The rat's food, if you don't hurry up and eat it" he bellowed.
Startled by this behavior, she quickly started to eat the food.
"Thank you." She whispered
He looked at her in disgust. Then laughed. It was a short, severe laugh, sort of like a slap in the face.
"You will be a good present." Another man laughed. He was also holding someone. She was a younger woman, and she had implants of some sort in her face.
As the young woman's holder laughed she looked over and smiled softly.
"You will be ok, Captain."
Last edited by Captain Leah Manzer on Sat Jun 28, 2003 2:41 am; edited 11 times in total
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 12:29 am |
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Good Start on the story. I've been writting a J/C and P/T story for about a month now just can't get passed the third page.
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 12:46 am |
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lol BAHH!! thanks this is my first story ever.... dont mind if it sux... lol but I'll add more to it tomorrow
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-_-VoyagerFanatic-_- Rear Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 3:35 am |
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sux?!?!?! this story sux?!?!?!
in your blessed dreams! (my mother told me to replace all foul words with blessed, in her quest to make me a lady, in which she will fail)
anyway, its a wonderful start:D
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For i dipped into the future
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Saw the vision of the world
And all wonder that would be
-Alfred Lord Tennyson [Quote on Voyager's dedication plaque]
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 3:43 pm |
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Great story!!
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 3:51 pm |
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Its a work in progress how can you say it sucks VoyagerFanatic
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 4:08 pm |
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Thanks everyone for you input lol... I'm really worried about it and i will be adding more today... (unles I fall asleep cuz i have volleyball pratice) ... CHapter one will be up sooon
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 4:27 pm |
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Chakotays Angel wrote: | Its a work in progress how can you say it sucks VoyagerFanatic |
She said the complete opposite!
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 4:32 pm |
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ok I'm started the chapter 1... I will Complete the first part of it in about 20 minutes
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 5:12 pm |
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Chapter one
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Chakotay looked down at the ground as a tear dropped from his eye and fell to the ground.
�How could this be happening?� he asked himself
He knew he had to regain his composure if he was going to face the crew. He was their only source of strength since the captain had been gone.
Three months. Three long depressing months without her encouraging smile everyday. She had only gone down to a planet for negotiations, and of course Tuvok had to come along. They were not heard from until three days later when the shuttle appeared on our sensors with one week life form aboard. Tuvok was unconscious, and was in saver condition. Tuvok told how as soon as they arrived they escorted himself and Captain Janeway into a room. He said that was the last time he saw her. They sent Seven down to the planet after to her but they hadn�t heard from her in months either. Right now he feared the worse.
He dreadfully missed he touches that would drive is crazy. But he knew he would have to be a role model for the crew.
�Be strong� he whispered to himself.
As he was leaving his quarters a familiar sound stopped him.
� Kim to Chakotay�
�Go ahead� he spoke out, hiding his sadness and regaining his confident tone.
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 5:15 pm |
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Ok well thats all I've written rite now.. I'll try and finish Chapter 1 later today :d but If not I'll Write more tomrrow... O
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 10:41 pm |
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Nice starting out point.
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 10:44 pm |
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BA!! i think is really sux :S but thats just me... I'll add more tonite but just not right now
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janewaykat Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 11:24 pm |
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very good
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 11:41 pm |
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thanks
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 11:50 pm |
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Hey I know how hard it is to write a story. Your doing a wonderful job on it .
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Wed Nov 06, 2002 11:54 pm |
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Thanks
WEll I'm go stop trying right now to Write one because it will be very horriale tomorrow lol so I will be on tomorrow with a new part <- if that makes any sence
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NIKKI13 Commodore
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 12:03 am |
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I LIKE
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 12:04 am |
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I LIKE
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 8:21 am |
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Voy_Girl wrote: | Chakotays Angel wrote: | Its a work in progress how can you say it sucks VoyagerFanatic |
She said the complete opposite! |
exactly, i'm sorry if you misunderstood, this is wad i meant.
your story's great, why in the blessed world do you say it sux. i said its great
that's what i said
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For i dipped into the future
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Saw the vision of the world
And all wonder that would be
-Alfred Lord Tennyson [Quote on Voyager's dedication plaque]
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 8:25 am |
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i just read the first chap. ok, if yours sux my dear madam, mine is the crappiest thing in the world! wait it is the crappiest thing in the world anyway, your story definetely does NOT suck.
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[First Time back online in 3 years]
For i dipped into the future
Far as the human eye could see
Saw the vision of the world
And all wonder that would be
-Alfred Lord Tennyson [Quote on Voyager's dedication plaque]
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Chakotays Angel Captain
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 12:50 pm |
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Its ok My story on the other hand dose sux only because I started writting it while on a car trip up to Nothern Idaho. I thinks she wrote one hell of a begin to the story
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Voy_Girl Admiral
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 3:30 pm |
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This is a great story so far...
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Alexandra Lieutenant, Junior Grade
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 5:08 pm |
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it sure is
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Captain Leah Manzer Vice Admiral
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Thu Nov 07, 2002 10:47 pm |
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lol thanks... sorry i didnt put anythiung on today... but i'll put a huge part tomorrow :d
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