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Curtis Fleet Admiral
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Mon Apr 01, 2002 8:40 pm |
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Yup...and we all happy!!!!!!! lol.
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Thu Apr 04, 2002 7:52 pm |
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Chapter 12: Rebirth
*It is just a few minutes after Jeff crashed into the factory his body is hurting and he can barley breath he stands up and looks around to him over 5,000 years has passed but it was only a few months at most he looks around he is having trouble trying to see and his powers are flowing from him all of a sudden he hears a voice from behind him*
The voice from behind Jeff says. �Hello are you ok you don�t look good.� Jeff looks at the person it�s a woman about his height and age but she looks a little like a elf with weird looking ears Jeff looks at her and says. �Who are you?� The woman walks up to Jeff and says. �Ondi is my name and I am here to help you re adjust to life.� Jeff looks at Ondi and says. �I don�t need help from anyone get away from me.� Ondi looks at Jeff and says. �No.� Jeff looks at Ondi and says, �Leave me alone.� Ondi replies. �No you will need me in the coming months.� Jeff goes to shoot a ball of fire at Ondi and she easily deflects it. �See your powers are not even up to full you need me come with me.� All of a sudden they disappear.
*Just after Jeff and Ondi disappear Jean and Faith arrive they look around but they don�t find anything but a impact crater*
Jean looks around. �Where is he at he should be here.� Faith looks around as well. �I don�t know but he should be here though.� As Faith and Jean look around the Demon and Scott are they�re spying on them Scott thinks to himself. �Whom are they talking about?�
To be continued�.
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Galadriel Captain
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Thu Apr 04, 2002 8:18 pm |
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Cool!!! Keep up the good work!!!
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Fri Apr 05, 2002 1:36 am |
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Im glad you like it here comes the hard part next thinking up names for chapters
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Ksim3000 Rear Admiral
Joined: 27 Mar 2002 Posts: 4952 Location: United Kingdom
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Fri Apr 05, 2002 8:31 pm |
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Hurry up and finish some more chapters ! I can't wait to read the rest.
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Sat Apr 06, 2002 2:35 pm |
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Here are the titles for the next few chapters
Chapter 13: Ondi (Done)
Chapter 14: Omnicorp (Done)
Chapter 15: The Demon (Done)
Chapter 16: Falling in love (Done)
Chapter 17: Bad memories (Done)
Chapter 18: Demons from hell (The Year Long Battle multiple parts)
Chapter 19: Old friends now new enemies
Chapter 20: Katie why?
Chapter 21: Jeans baby
Chapter 22: The Prophecy
Chapter 23: Down but not out
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Whats wrong Angel your afraid you will loose your soul again you know you may like it
-Darla
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Mon Apr 08, 2002 2:21 am |
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Chapter 13: Ondi
*Jeff and Ondi apear at a nicely decorated appartment Jeff doesn't feel good he looks around he looks at Ondi and says. "Where are we?" Jeff feels his head than falls down and hits the floor he closes his eyes and feels like the room is spining Ondi walks over to him and says. "Your at my place your suffering from the effects of the border from hell back to earth don't worry you will feel better soon you need to rest and get your strenght back." Ondi brings Jeff some food and he looks at her and says. "I don't need help from anyone and I don't need it from a stranger like you now get out of my way Im leaving." Jeff gets up and heads to the door but the room starts to spin again he leans up against the wall and falls down Ondi goes to help Jeff up but Jeff goes to punch her she stops him and ends up throwing him onto the couch Jeff can't even move he is that weak Jeff looks at Ondi and says. "What are you?" Ondi looks at Jeff and says I am a Morlock I have been alive for 13 years what you see is my outward apearence I have different powers." All of a sudden Ondi shapeshifts into a beauitfull human Jeff looks at her and says. "What do you do?" Ondi looks at Jeff and says. "I work for the city and I have had my eye on you I sense powers from you are you one of my kind?" Jeff looks at Ondi and says.
To be Continued....
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Galadriel Captain
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Mon Apr 08, 2002 11:20 am |
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Very very cool!!!!!!! Hurry up and write some more!!!
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Ksim3000 Rear Admiral
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Mon Apr 08, 2002 7:43 pm |
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I'm already excited for the next chapters.
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Tue Apr 09, 2002 12:04 pm |
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Here is a hint the Chapter intilted Falling in love and the Chapter called Jeans baby they can give you a clue to who the father is
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shrek man Whiz Kid
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Tue Apr 09, 2002 12:07 pm |
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Very cool.
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Tue Apr 09, 2002 12:08 pm |
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Thanks I try
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Xerena Paris Freshman Cadet
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 5:26 pm |
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Very intruging in dead... very very good!
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 6:04 pm |
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Thanks
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 6:04 pm |
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Chapter 14: OmniCorp
Jeff looks at Ondi after she asked her question and says. �No Im not like you I�m a human flesh and blood I am different but I am not like you.� Jeff gets up and looks outside he sees a huge building he looks at Ondi and says. �What�s that place I don�t remember that place when I was alive.� Ondi walks over to him and says. �That�s OmniCorp it�s a new business that just came to town.� Jeff looks at Ondi and says. �Who owns it?� Ondi replies. �Scott Wesley.� Jeff stops her and says. �Scott Wesley? I knew him from school he was a friend of mine and Katie�s speaking of that we need to get to the base they will be happy to see me.� Ondi stops him. �You need to rest before you go back your powers are not even at half strength and right now there are Demons outside they would kill you again if you were to fight them.� Jeff lies down on the couch and says. �Your right I need to rest I need a few hours�..� Jeff falls asleep Ondi covers him up and goes to her room she lays down and goes to sleep.
*Meanwhile at OmniCorp*
The Demon walks over to the window and looks out he sees the demons destroying the neighborhood he looks at Scott and says. �If you don�t mind me asking why did you make OmniCorp?� Scott looks at the Demon and says I made it so it looks like it�s a good place to work but when the time comes this will be the flash point where a portal will open letting thousands of demons into our relm I will control them all and I will rule the world.� The Demon looks at Scott and says. �What makes you think that they will not just send a missile at this building?� Scott replies. �This building uses a necular reactor no one will bomb it in fear that the radiation will kill everyone so we are safe.� The Demon looks at Scott and says. �What do you think Jean and Faith was looking for at the ruins?� Scott looks at the Demon and says. �I don�t know but they didn�t find it I wonder what it was that they were looking for I need to look into it.� Scott looks at the Demon and says. �Ask the demons on the street see if they know anything.� The Demon looks at Scott and says. �Yes sir.�
To Be Continued�.
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~Tony Montana wrote: | You know what you need people like me people for you to snub your nose at and point at saying there is a bad man. Well guess what This bad man is leaving. Say goodnight to the BAD MAN! |
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Curtis Fleet Admiral
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 6:49 pm |
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Holey Smokes!!! Neato job Jeff, keep it up.
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Ksim3000 Rear Admiral
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 8:03 pm |
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I can't wait for the next chapter! Hurry!
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Wed Apr 10, 2002 8:16 pm |
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This is not another chapter but this is what Ondi is dreaming of when she went to bed in other words here is a preview of what you can find.
Katie: Jeff don't think of what your leaving if you do this your baby Jean me your friends.
Jeff: If I don't seal the rift the Demons will get through and the necular reactor will explode its my only choice
Jean: Jeff please put down the barrier I love you
Jeff: Good bye all (Jeff puts his hands on the reactor and dies saving the earth)
in the next dream sequance that Ondi has here is what she sees
Jeff: Where am I
Voices: The chosen one is here good
Jeff: Who are you?
Voices: We are the past, We are the present, We are the future we are the powers to be you will be out champion
Jeff: No I don't want to live just let me die
Powers to be: Death is not in your destiny (The powers give Jeff their powers)
(In another Dream sequence ondi sees)
The Demon: now you die Champion
Jeff: Bring it on
I hope this peaks everyones intrest in the story thanks let me know what you think after you read this
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Galadriel Captain
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Thu Apr 11, 2002 1:51 pm |
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Cool, cool!!!!! Very nice!!!!
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Curtis Fleet Admiral
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Thu Apr 11, 2002 5:26 pm |
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WOW WOW WOW!!!!! Neato!!!!!!!!!!
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Ksim3000 Rear Admiral
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Thu Apr 11, 2002 7:45 pm |
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Excellent!
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Thu Apr 11, 2002 10:19 pm |
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I will probably post the next chapter after I move I will have something good cooked up
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Thu Apr 18, 2002 4:25 pm |
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Nevermind this post
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shrek man Whiz Kid
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Thu Apr 18, 2002 4:27 pm |
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Chapter 15 was good.
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Jeff Miller Fleet Admiral
Joined: 22 Nov 2001 Posts: 23947 Location: Mental Ward for the Mentaly Unstable 6th floor, Saint John's 1615 Delaware Longview Washington 98632
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Thu Apr 18, 2002 4:30 pm |
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Chapter 15: The Demon
The Demon walks into the meeting room at OmniCorp he looks around and sees Scott he walks over to him. "What is on your mind boss?" Scott Replies. "What is it that Faith and that Jean were looking for what is a Hunter? Do you know anything about a Hunter?" Scott looks at the Demon the Demon replies. "No sir I know nothing of a Hunter." Scott looks at him and Replies. "I know you dont and besides you are too stupid to hide anything from me." Scott walks out of the room the Demon walks over to the window and thinks to himself. "Stupid am I? Boy your in for one big surprise I know what a Hunter is I remember them all to good." He lifts up his shirt and looks at the scars he than thinks to himself. "It was 150 years ago when I had a run in with a Hunter he was fast and powerful I barley got away but I did now I want nothing more than to kill the hunter all of them when I get a chance I will kill Scott and take over OmniCorp than I will rule the world but I have to take it slow so no one will think anything hehehehehe."
*Jean is walking through an empty building she found out that it is a nest but there are no Vampires around* Jean thinks to herself. "Where are they why are they not here maybe Faith was right maybe I was told wrong." All of a sudden a group of Vampires appear. "There she is there is the Hunter she looks young hmm lets turn her hehehe. They rush Jean she tries to fight them off but they are too much for her she drops Jeff's sword she screams for help but nothing happens the lead Vampire grabs her and starts to kiss her while the others a cheering him on he than tears Jeans shirt exposing her shoulder Jean is screaming for her life but no one comes one of the Vampires says. "Yeah get her boss hehe yeah ahhh." All of a sudden the Vampire becomes dust they all turn around and they see a figure the figure rushes them and then he kills them all then the figure grabs the leaders neck and pulls off his head dusting him Jean looks at the figure and she recognizes him its Jeff she looks at him and hugs him. "Jeff your alive youre really alive."
To Be Continued....
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