my poetry

[Alucard]

Ok well I'm gonna get brave and post some of my stuff.

Here it is, either hate it or love it, and feedback would be appreciated.



Ok, this stuff is totally random, and I want to change it into song lyrics:

Her touch is like ice
Freezing but delightful
The eyes of her gave
Terrible glares of evil

She seems happy
Decieving us with lies
All the thoughts we had were wrong
Lies staining our sheets with blood


(That's all for the lyric stuff.)


Ok, this stuff I wrote about my last breakup... which happened because she cheated on me so that's the point the stuff is getting at.
Here it is:


They loved each other
So he had believed
But she felt love
for another, so painful

He was ripped apart
by her simple work
he cares too much
he cannot help that

So now he must
hate himself for it
even though it's stupid
He loves her so

She seemed so contempt
She truely seemed happy
all lies to him
as he dies inside


She wasn't happy enough
Her feelings weren't good
All he wanted was
for her to love him

But it all stopped
Even his own heart
for it was broken
because of another person

All he needs is
her to be happy
but she lost feelings
and all his respect



One month
on top
of the
world

next month
she's decided
she loves
another

cuts gashes
screams cries
showed his
pain

He wishes
He could
Change history
painless

He would
only be
making them
happy

But clearly
their hapiness
would never
happen


He loves her
It's not enough
She acts different

like it's all
okay, but he
still hurts inside

she loves another
he cannot believe
they were happy

Until he *beep*
everything they had
He was better

So now I
lay here dying
Whilst stuck alive



His love lasts
but hers
died

All he wants
is them
together

She seems to
not care
scarring

He wants death
knowing thats
impossible

seeing them together
is so
painful

He only wants
Her in his (I know i screwed up)
arms




There they are... feedback would be nice please and thank you

[Micteth-Son of Udas]

not bad man, i actually like it..... um mind if i post some of my stuff in here?

[Alucard]

Sorry it took so long to post back but go ahead.