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3 of 7 Commodore
Joined: 18 Feb 2004 Posts: 1168 Location: Unicomplex, Borg Space, Delta Quadrant, Milkyway
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Thu Jan 06, 2005 7:25 am Renegade |
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This is my first Fanfic that I'm posting on the web, I'm not quite finished with it yet, so it will be posted in pieces. Here's the story:
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The sun was shining through the trees of the forrest. It's rays revealed a wreck of a once powerful starship on the ground.
First it wasn't any signs of any survivers, but suddenly there was a movement.
It was a woman, and she was trying to build a beacon to call for reinforcements from her own kind. Her servo-arm moved over the controls.
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Well, that's the beginning. What do you think of it?
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lionhead Rear Admiral
Joined: 26 May 2004 Posts: 4020 Location: The Delta Quadrant (or not...)
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Thu Jan 06, 2005 7:32 am |
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Sounds great, it definitly got my attention.
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3 of 7 Commodore
Joined: 18 Feb 2004 Posts: 1168 Location: Unicomplex, Borg Space, Delta Quadrant, Milkyway
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Mon Jan 10, 2005 10:11 am |
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Ok, here's the continuing:
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It was almost fininshed, just needed a little bit more working.
Then she heard something in the bushes. She wanted to stay to finish the beacon, but also thought she needed to check out who it was. So she walked to some trees nearby to see better.
"They said it would be around here."
It was three Starfleet officers; she could see them.
"Did they also saw what kind of ship it was, lt. McCoy?" Asked one of them.
"No, just that it was a ship which was in trouble."
The three Starfleet officers were lt. James McCoy, ensign Harry Fiddis and lt. commander Andrew Connery.
Then they rounded the corner, they could see the ship.
"Jikes, it's a Borg Cube!!! Or what's left of it, anyway... I really hope there isn't any survivors." Said ensign Fiddis.
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Okey, I'm still working on how this should continue, so this is all I put here for now. But I will post more as soon as I have more to the story.
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Voy_Girl Admiral
Joined: 07 Jan 2002 Posts: 8302 Location: Fair Haven
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Fri Jan 28, 2005 3:37 pm |
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I'll sticky this for a while. I think you should try to add a bit longer chapters, though, so that people really can get into the story.
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Curtis Fleet Admiral
Joined: 29 Sep 2001 Posts: 14903 Location: Wisconsin
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Tue Feb 08, 2005 11:56 pm |
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Voy_Girl wrote: | I think you should try to add a bit longer chapters, though, so that people really can get into the story. |
Yeah, I agree...other than that though, I think this is a great piece of work so far .
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Micteth-Son of Udas Klingon Warrior
Joined: 20 Jul 2002 Posts: 3202 Location: rite behind you!
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Captain Skenandore wrote: | Voy_Girl wrote: | I think you should try to add a bit longer chapters, though, so that people really can get into the story. |
Yeah, I agree...other than that though, I think this is a great piece of work so far . |
Skenandore seconds and i pass the notion, you must now make longer chapters before posting them!
*sits down*
JK, its pretty good, i look foward to reading more of it later so ill keep checking up on the forum.
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Captain McKinnon Ensign, Junior Grade
Joined: 15 Feb 2005 Posts: 35 Location: Federation Starship Voyager
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Sat Feb 19, 2005 6:33 pm |
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I kinda hate borg
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missl Captain
Joined: 18 Feb 2005 Posts: 675
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Sun Feb 20, 2005 12:24 am |
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i honastly think that u hav done a gr8 job at it wen dose the book come out to australia i would read that book ova and ova again
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Lord Borg Fleet Admiral
Joined: 27 May 2003 Posts: 11214 Location: Vulcan Capital City, Vulcan
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Sun Feb 20, 2005 2:56 pm |
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very cool
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lionhead Rear Admiral
Joined: 26 May 2004 Posts: 4020 Location: The Delta Quadrant (or not...)
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Thu Feb 24, 2005 9:50 am |
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3 of 7 wrote: |
Okey, I'm still working on how this should continue, so this is all I put here for now. But I will post more as soon as I have more to the story. |
i can't wait!
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