Mikes colection of poetry (my own)

[Micteth-Son of Udas]

I like to write poetry and id like your feed back on my work, ive allready posted these on the site, but im at school and not at home were my other works are at. so ill ad my others in a hour or two.

"Saddness."
Torn and lost,
It comes at a cost.
Mom and Dad
It's all making me sad.
My life is like my dreams,
It all falls apart at the seams.
Must I live with just one?
It seems they are done.
So fun, all those years.
Now they bring me to tears.
I was so small,
But I stood tall.
This brought my lonelyness.
This is my sadness.
-Mike Canary


"Unfair"
They harm you in ways they dont know.
It always make me feel low
The attacks are endless causing so much pain.
They come so slow like a repetative chain
Harm and hate.
Is this my Fate?
i lay in my bed.
i fell so dead
-Mike Canary

"Release"
It releases us trought out the day
so we can go out and play
While we have our fun
We must rember its allmost done
All day we play this game
So we two will gain our fame
This sound, we love and hate
Will determine our fate
The sound sings joys at the end of the day
So we all go on our way
Untill the very next day.
-Mike Canary

"Blind"
Love is blind or so they say,
But i will find it in my own way.
And when i do it will live
my heart is open, ill i do is give.
-Mike Canary

From my journel(religous)
"Tough"
They all act tough.
They all think their cool
They all think their rough
But their just fools.

They play their games,
They think its fun.
But they dont know god,
When its all said in done.
-Mike Canary

"Faith"
Love and Hate,
I choos the better,
I dont want an ugly fate.

Jesus is in my heart,
There he will stay,
Until this life i depart.

With all the games,
People think life is just for fun,
Untill eternity goes up in flames.

So once apon a time.
Everyone lived in sin,
And satan controlled it all.
But then it stoped on a dime,
And people stoped the fall.

Now we live with god,
I now love my life,
and now i say to you,
Go with a cheer,
Not sheading a tear.
-Mike Canary

[Micteth-Son of Udas]

Alone
My room is mine alone
people see choas
but i see order
this is my personel zone

Only a few may enter
I must know the people that do
It is my home
home of the mad inventor

Its the only place i can go
to be alone and away
from the words and pains
away from the status quo

You know the zone
Youll find me there
In the dark
siting alone.

[Defiant]

(see? I remembered! )

I think your poetry is good. Its colorful and insightful, well done.